Could you check the sentences below.

2013-10-01 · 첨삭 강사 Hannah

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Good morning Maria, Could you check the sentences below. 1)Would you consider using a packing service when moving to a new place? I prefer using a packing service because I don't want my furniture to get scratch and damaged physically. Moreover, It saved my time and energy. Although there are many benefit things to move by myself such as saving money, taking good more care of items. But, I mcuh consider the my time and energy when I use a packing service. 2)How many times have you moved to a new place to live in your lifetime? I have moved to a new house at least 4 times. I left my hometown at 20 years old for entering an university and I lived in China and Canada. Because I like to challenge myself to get a new experience. 3)Where do you find informatinon on renting or buying houeses? I usually find information on the web when I renting or buying houses because it is easy to find a good deal. Thanks for your time to check them. See you later. [이름],

강사 첨삭

Good morning!

Thank you for doing your homework! I am impressed with your work because you were able to answer the questions very well.

In addition to that, they were spot on correct, we just need to work a little more on your sentence structures and tenses and I\'m sure you\'d be even better

than before! :)

 Once again, thank you for sending this in. A job well done! 

I look forward to our next class. See you then!

~T.Maria~

 Good morning Maria,
Could you check the sentences below.

>> Correct!  [?]
1)Would you consider using a packing service when moving to a new place? 
I prefer using a packing service because I don\'t want my furniture to get scratch and damaged physically.

>> I prefer using a packing service because I don\'t want my furniture to get any scratches and physical damage.

Moreover, It saved my time and energy.

>> Correct!

Although there are many benefit things to move by myself such as saving money, taking good more care of items.

>> Although there are many benefits if I choose to move these things by myself, such as saving money and taking good care of the items.

But, I mcuh consider the my time and energy when I use a packing service.
>> But I would rather consider the time and energy spent when I use a packing service.

2)How many times have you moved to a new place to live in your lifetime? 
I have moved to a new house at least 4 times.

>> Correct!  Or you also try saying, I have moved at least four times.

I left my hometown at 20 years old for entering an university and I lived in China and Canada.

>> I left my hometown when I was 20 years old, when I entered university, and I have also lived in China and Canada.

Because I like to challenge myself to get a new experience.

>> Correct!  Or you can also try saying, Because I like the challenge of getting new experiences.
3)Where do you find informatinon on renting or buying houeses?

>>correct [information; houses]
I usually find information on the web when I renting or buying houses because it is easy to find a good deal.
>> I usually find information on the web when I consider renting or buying houses because it is easier to find a good deal by surfing the internet.

Thanks for your time to check them. 

>> Thanks for your time in checking them.
See you later.
[이름],

>> Correct!^^

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