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1.My co-workers and I are gonna have a farewell party on this weekend. 2.I suggest for you to wear this skirt. 3.The release dates of new bag was delayed for a while. 4.Could we put out appointment off for one day? 5.My grandmother is partial to my brother in all grandson, because he is a primogeniture. 6.He is a big cheese to me. 7.When people can conceal oneself, they can write the hate comments and bully the other people easier. 8.It seems a good idea to require to use their real names when people make their account online. 9.It would help prevent online offense. 10.I went to eat "Hae Sin Tang" with my friend on Sunday. 11.Hae Sin Tang is a kind of health food. 12.It is a stew made of duck,abalones,octopus,shrimps,clams and much more. 13.I felt healthier after eating it. 14.It has been cold suddenly. Fall is coming. 15.I'm already afraid of the cold. 16.I'm out of work from today. I feel like flying. 17.I'm gonna get enough rest.

Hello Ms. [이름]! Thanks for sending in these sentences for me to check. Please review my corrections below. ^^ Be careful with the construction and syntax next time okay? ^^ I\'m happy for you. Now you can get more rest and focus on studying English. I do hope you can find a better job soon! CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ 1.My co-workers and I are gonna have a farewell party on this weekend. >> CORRECT OR >> My co-workers and I are going to have a farewell party this weekend.2.I suggest for you to wear this skirt. >> I suggest that you wear this skirt.3.The release dates of new bag was delayed for a while. >> The release date of the new bag was delayed for a while.4.Could we put out appointment off for one day? >> Could we put our appointment off for one day?5.My grandmother is partial to my brother in all grandson, because he is a primogeniture. >> My grandmother is biased when it comes to my brother, among all her grandsons, because he is primogeniture. 6.He is a big cheese to me.>> CORRECT OR >> He is a big cheese compared to me. - better 7.When people can conceal oneself, they can write the hate comments and bully the other people easier. >> When people can conceal themselves, they can easily write hate comments and bully other people online. OR >> If people can hide their real identities, they can easily write hate comments and bully other people online. 8.It seems a good idea to require to use their real names when people make their account online. >> CORRECT Or >> It seems like a good idea to require the use of real names when people make their accounts online.9.It would help prevent online offense. >> CORRECT OR >> It would help prevent cyber crimes.10.I went to eat \"Hae Sin Tang\" with my friend on Sunday. >> CORRECT11.Hae Sin Tang is a kind of health food. >> CORRECT OR >> Hae Sin Tang is a kind of healthy/nutritious food.12.It is a stew made of duck,abalones,octopus,shrimps,clams and much more. >> CORRECT13.I felt healthier after eating it. >> CORRECT14.It has been cold suddenly. Fall is coming. >> It suddenly got cold. Fall is approaching.15.I\'m already afraid of the cold. >> CORRECT OR >> I\'m already anxious about the cold weather.16.I\'m out of work from today. I feel like flying. >> I\'m out of work starting today. I feel like flying. OR >> I don\'t have to work starting today. I feel like flying.17.I\'m gonna get enough rest. >> CORRECT