Could you correct to english composition
학생이 쓴 원문
I'm sorry I've missed the phone call yesterday!!
I overslept at 12 a.m.
Because I had partide till at night.
so, I'm sorry.
Next time I'll give notice a day beforehand.
I'm full of energy!
Although, it's rannig.
My mind is warm sping sunshine.
I was manic for a month..
Because, was my project.
Personally it was important work.
My everthing was attention to project.
Anyway, the project finished in great success
and I need to take a some break.
강사 첨삭
Jina,
It’s OK. I understand that kind of situation sometimes happens. ^^I am so glad to see one of your compositions in here. I checked some sentences but some are already correct. I noticed that you tried to separate some sentences into different phrases. You should make sure that the sentences are complete and gives a thought. You can do better. Keep it up! ^^
XOXO,Jenny
I'm sorry I've missed the phone call yesterday!!
>>Correct.I overslept at 12 a.m.
>>I overslept until 12nn
>> I overslept until noon.Because I had partide till at night.
>> It’s because I partied the night before that.
So, I'm sorry.
>>Correct.Next time I'll give notice a day beforehand.
>> Next time, I’ll give a notice beforehand.I'm full of energy!
>>Correct.Although, it's rannig. My mind is warm sping sunshine.>>Although it’s raining, my mind is warm like the spring sunshine.I was manic for a month..
>>Correct.Because, was my project.
>>It was because of my project.Personally it was important work.
>>It was a very important work.My everthing was attention to project.
>>I focused all my attention to the project.Anyway, the project finished in great success
>> Anyway, I was able to successfully finish the project.and I need to take a some break.
>>And now, I need to take some break.
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