Could you please correct my sentence? Take your time, it's not urgent.

1.My boss came to my room without a knock. It's the clear encroachment. 2.I wonder the story about him and her. Please tell me, I promise to keep it under my hat. 3.He was too handsome to being fulgurant when I saw him in the fresh air. 4.The scene through the window of my room will knock you socks off. 5.I'm still tired because I played too hard on this past weekend. I'm afraid to go to work. 6.I really owe to my friend Hyegyo because I have relied on her whenever I had trouble. 7.She wanted to be supported from him. = She wanted to get support from him. 8.We have dated since we were freshmen in university. 9.An Chulsu has been my mentor from long time ago. 10.Lee Misuk delated the reporter for the entertainment business. 11.I hate to do something off the cuff. 12.I had a dinner at 5 in the pharmacy. After then, I didn't eat anything because I talked on the phone with my friend too long. 13.I didn't do anything else. I slept just after that call. 14.The cloning organism is the same life organism like us. Who are responsible for the cloning organism, and how? Of course it can give us a lot of benefit. But the damage is much more than the benefit. 15.I guess the topic is just talking about the need to challenge for young people. 16.There were a lot of courses that we should take even if we didn't want to study it. 17.Some courses were helpful to me like a English class. Although I took the class by force at first. 18.I prefered to eat out when I lived with my family in Daegu. Because I ate at home everyday. But now I'm disgusted to eat out. I miss the old days when my mom prepared so many delicious food for me everyday. 19.I had my bans cut. I have been growing my bangs for 6 months hardly. But I went to the hairshop impulsively. 20.Not too bad. I think it makes me look younger than before. 21.My friend Eunjung inspired me to select my major. I had never thought to enter College of Pharmacy. Then she talked about the professional benefit of pharmacist. So I became to know about it and selected it. 22.I entirely agree with Steven Jobs' state, "Don't waste it living someone else's life". It's important to live each own life. 23.Do you have any aspiration of your major? 24.I have respected my foster father. 25.I felt scared when he talked about his uncanny dream that seemed to tell him the future. 26.This sunglass is old hat, so I cannot go out wearing it. 27.I gleaned a number of datas from here and there to write a paper. 28.If you want to pass the exam, you should pull your socks up. 29.She treated me to a drink many times. So it's my turn to treat. 30.I'm under a lot of pressure of studying English these days. 31.I want to get a lot of attention from him. 32.Coffee makes me really nervous. 33.I usually eat some delicious food like chocolate snacks to reduce my stress. But it's no use. It only acts that moment when I eat the food. 34.Marriage is of course stressful for women. It's the same for men. Especially to mediate between both families will be the most stressful in my thoughts. 35.In my case, I need a teacher in studying English. But I need not a teacher in studying Mathematics. So it depends on what we learn. 36.I felt strange. So I cried. 37.I feel bad due to my hair. My new hair doesn't match me. So these days, I'm feeling blue. 38.The topic is all about the breathing place of each people. 39.I visit the place when I need to organize my thoughts and want to be alone. 40.I feel relaxed. And I can reduce my stress by being there. 41.We can think about ourselves when having a quiet time alone. Having a time to think about our own mind, feeling, behavior is really important and necessary. 42.Weariness may makes us get sick emotionally and physically.

Hi Ms. [이름]! Thanks for your concern but I still need to check this immediately and finish it quickly. ^^ That\'s the company rule so I cannot just \'take my time\' even if I want to. Hehe. Anyway, please review my corrections here. Talk to you tomorrow. CIAO! ~Teacher Marie~ 1.My boss came to my room without a knock. It\'s a clear encroachment. >> CORRECT2.I\'m wondering about their story. Please tell me, I promise to keep it under my hat. >> CORRECT3.He was too handsome to being fulgurant when I saw him in the fresh air. >> He was too handsome and fulgurant when I saw him outside.4.The scene through the window of my room will knock your socks off. >> CORRECT5.I\'m still tired because I played too hard on this past weekend. >> I\'m still tired because I partied too hard this past weekend. I\'m afraid to go to work. >> CORRECT6.I really owe to my friend Hyegyo because I have relied on her whenever I had trouble. >> CORRECT7.She wanted to be supported from him. = She wanted to get support from him. >> CORRECT8.We have dated since we were freshmen in the university. >> CORRECT9.An Chulsu has been my mentor from a long time ago. >> CORRECT OR >> An Chulsu has been my mentor since a long time ago.10.Lee Misuk delated the reporter from the entertainment business. >> CORRECT11.I hate to do something off the cuff. >> I hate doing something off the cuff.12.I had dinner at 5 in the pharmacy. >> CORRECT After that, I didn\'t eat anything because I talked on the phone with my friend for too long. >> CORRECT13.I didn\'t do anything else. >> CORRECT I slept just after that call. >> I slept right after that call.14.The cloning organism is the same life organism like us. >> CORRECT Who are responsible for the cloning organism, and how? >> Who is responsible for the cloning organism, and how? Of course it can give us a lot of benefit. >> CORRECT But the damage is much more than the benefit. >> But the damage is greater than the benefit.15.I guess the topic is just talking about the need to challenge for young people. >> I guess this topic is about the need to challenge young people.16.There were a lot of courses that we should take even if we didn\'t want to study it. >> CORRECT17.Some courses were helpful to me like the English class. >> CORRECT Although I took the class by force at first. >> Although I took the class involuntarily at first.18.I preferred to eat out when I lived with my family in Daegu. >> CORRECT Because I ate at home everyday. But now I\'m disgusted to eat out. I miss the old days when my mom prepared so many delicious food for me everyday. >> CORRECT19.I had my bans cut. >> I had my bangs cut. OR >> I cut my bangs. I have been growing my bangs for 6 months hardly. >> I have been growing my bangs for 6 months already. But I went to the hairshop impulsively. >> CORRECT OR >> But I went to the hair salon impulsively.20. Not too bad. I think it makes me look younger than before. >> CORRECT21.My friend Eunjung inspired me to select my major. >> CORRECT I had never thought to enter College of Pharmacy. >> I had never thought of entering the College of Pharmacy. Then she talked about the professional benefits of being a pharmacist. >> CORRECT So I became to know about it and selected it. >> So I started to know more about it and I chose it.22.I entirely agree with Steven Jobs\' state, \"Don\'t waste it living someone else\'s life\". >> I entirely agree with what Steve Jobs said, \" Don\'t waste it living someone else\'s life.\" It\'s important to live our own life.>> CORRECT 23.Do you have any aspiration in your major? >> CORRECT24.I have respected my foster father. >> CORRECT25.I felt scared when he talked about his uncanny dream that seemed to tell him about the future. >> CORRECT26.This sunglass is old hat, so I cannot go out wearing it. >> CORRECT27.I gleaned a number of datas from here and there to write a paper. >> CORRECT28.If you want to pass the exam, you should pull your socks up. >> CORRECT29.She treated me to a drink many times. So it\'s my turn to treat. >> CORRECT30.I\'m under a lot of pressure studying English these days. >> CORRECT31.I want to get a lot of attention from him. >> CORRECT32.Coffee makes me really nervous. >> CORRECT33.I usually eat some delicious food like chocolate snacks to reduce my stress. But it\'s no use. >> CORRECT It only acts that moment when I eat the food. >> It only takes effect a few moments after I eat it.34.Marriage is of course stressful for women. It\'s the same for men. >> CORRECT Especially to mediate between both families will be the most stressful in my thoughts. >> Mediating between the two families is the most stressful part for me. 35.In my case, I need a teacher in studying English. >> In my case, I need a teacher to help me study English. But I need not a teacher in studying Mathematics. So it depends on what we learn.>> But I don\'t need a Math teacher. So it depends on what we learn. 36.I felt strange. So I cried. >> CORRECT37.I feel bad due to my hair. My new hair doesn\'t match me. So these days, I\'m feeling blue. >> CORRECT38.The topic is all about the breathing place of each people. >> The topic is all about the breathing/relaxing place for every person.39.I visit the place when I need to organize my thoughts and want to be alone. >> CORRECT40.I feel relaxed. And I can reduce my stress by being there. >> I feel relaxed and I can reduce my stress when I\'m there.41.We can think about ourselves when we are having a quiet time alone. Having time to think about our own thoughts, feelings and behavior is really important and necessary. >> CORRECT42.Weariness may makes us get sick emotionally and physically. >> Weariness can make us sick emotionally and physically.