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It is not a mandatory requirement but optional today as I mentioned before, but it will be legalized in Jan. 2015 according to the current draft announced by the government. At this stage, you may view this as merely a maketing issue, however we sometimes need to put customer's demand/voice on the top priority other than anything else unless we have a good reason not to do like cost or regulatory issues. Unlike other models, ATS has separate DRL lamps apart from the headlamp assembly so that inactive DRL is easily noticeable and induces a lot of complaints from customers. This is why we have raised the issue and asked for your assistance. We are not requesting you to issue an official service upate or a customer satisfaction campaign. Once the calibration is available for us, we can manage to handle the issue here locally without further support from your side. We strongly hope and appreciate you could consider the issue again unless it incurs additional cost or workloads.

Hi there SIR [이름]^^ HAPPY THRUSDAY! Thank you for sending this in. I really appreicate your time and effort. I hope that everything will be okay. I am looking forward to talk to you later in class. Thank you for entrusting me personal matters like this. I am so glad to have you in class. See you! Take Care! Teacher Nina Here are my corrections for you: It is not a mandatory requirement but optional today as I mentioned before, but it will be legalized in Jan. 2015 according to the current draft announced by the government. >> It is not a mandatory requirement but it\'s optional for today as I mentioned before. It will be legalized in Jan. 2015 according to the current draft announced by the government. At this stage, you may view this as merely a maketing issue, however we sometimes need to put customer\'s demand/voice on the top priority other than anything else unless we have a good reason not to do like cost or regulatory issues. >> At this stage, you may view this merely as a maketing issue, however we sometimes need to put the customer\'s demand on the top other than anything else unless we have a good reason not to do such as cost or regulatory issues. OR >> >> At this stage, you may view this merely as a maketing issue, however we sometimes need to prioritize the customer\'s demand other than anything else unless we have a good reason not to do such as cost or regulatory issues. Unlike other models, ATS has separate DRL lamps apart from the headlamp assembly so that inactive DRL is easily noticeable and induces a lot of complaints from customers. >> Unlike other models, ATS has separate DRL lamps apart from the headlamp assembly and the inactive DRL is noticeable and induces a lot fo complaints form customers. This is why we raised the issue and asked for your assistance. >> Correct! OR >> This is why we escalated the issue and asked for your assistance. We are not requesting you to issue an official service upate or a customer satisfaction campaign. >> We are not requesting you to issue an official service update or a customer satisfaction campaign. Once the calibration is available for us, we can manage to handle the issue here locally without further support from your side. >> Once the calibration is available, we can manage to handle the issue here locally without further support from your side. We strongly hope and appreciate you could consider the issue again unless it incurs additional cost or workloads. >> We strongly hope and appreciate that you could consider the issue again unless it incurs additional cost or workloads.