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2012-03-27 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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I'm writing to express my interest in the Korea international trade Internship program in Samsung listed on jobkorea.com. I have an experience volunteering for Korean Food exhibition in Vancouver which was held during one week. Secondly, I’ve volunteered with international friends in Cambodia and Vietnam. In addition, I traveled several countries such as USA, Canada, and China. Especailly, I did backpack trip in Europe. My main responsibility at the Korean food Exhibition was to translate Korean into English for making a smoother process and explain about Korean traditional food to foreigners who were interested in Korean Food. What’s more, to promote this show widely, I assisted marketing departure and worked by making poster and putting them up with colleagues from different countries. Therefore, I’m quite comfortable with making new foreign friends and have an open-minded perspective on global issues. In addition, I had an experience in volunteering program in Cambodia and Vietnam two years ago, for one month. I collaborated to build new houses for poor friends with team members and because of that experience, I could learn how to build good relationship and how teamwork and harmony are important. I’ve traveled several countries. While I stayed in Vancouver, I attended an advanced level in English class and got a CAE certificate (Cambridge in Advanced English ). When I did backpack trip in Europe through my English skill I could finish my trip safely and made many new friends and learned many new things from my global friends. I believe that my experiences in global background and interpersonal skills make me a prime candidate for this program. I am a diligent worker, and passionate about my work. I will be valuable asset to your company and use this as an opportunity to grow and further the development of my career in trade business field. Thank you very much for considering my application for candidacy. I will follow up within a week to confirm that all of my materials were received and hopefully set up an interview time. Sincerely,

강사 첨삭

Hello my dear [이름], thank you so much for sending in your composition tonight.. I\'m impressed with you..so much! I really hope I also have those kinds of experiences you had before.. I\'m sure they will qualify you for this Program,,,Good luck for that my dear.. And please do take care of yourself always, you should be very healthy for this..:) Have a good night my dear Teacher Cam^^ I\'m writing to express my interest in the Korea international trade Internship program in Samsung listed on jobkorea.com. >>correct I have an experience volunteering for Korean Food exhibition in Vancouver which was held during one week. >>I have an experience volunteering for Korean Food exhibition in Vancouver which was held one week. Secondly, I\'ve volunteered with international friends in Cambodia and Vietnam. >>correct In addition, I traveled several countries such as USA, Canada, and China. Especailly, I did backpack trip in Europe. >>correctMy main responsibility at the Korean food Exhibition was to translate Korean into English for making a smoother process and explain about Korean traditional food to foreigners who were interested in Korean Food. >>correct  What\'s more, to promote this show widely, I assisted marketing departure and worked by making poster and putting them up with colleagues from different countries. >>What\'s more, to promote this show widely, I assisted the marketing departure and worked by making posters and putting them up with colleagues from different countries. Therefore, I\'m quite comfortable with making new foreign friends and have an open-minded perspective on global issues. >>correct In addition, I had an experience in volunteering program in Cambodia and Vietnam two years ago, for one month. >>In addition, I had an experience in a Volunteer program in Cambodia and Vietnam 2 years ago, for a month. I collaborated to build new houses for poor friends with team members and because of that experience, I could learn how to build good relationship and how teamwork and harmony are important.>>correct >>I collaborated to build new houses for poor friends with team members and because of that experience, I could learn how to build good relationship and how important teamwork and harmony are.I\'ve traveled several countries. >>Ive traveled to several countries. While I stayed in Vancouver, I attended an advanced level in English class and got a CAE certificate (Cambridge in Advanced English ). >>correct  When I did backpack trip in Europe through my English skill I could finish my trip safely and made many new friends and learned many new things from my global friends. >>correctI believe that my experiences in global background and interpersonal skills make me a prime candidate for this program. >>correct I am a diligent worker, and passionate about my work. >>correct  I will be valuable asset to your company and use this as an opportunity to grow and further the development of my career in trade business field. >> I will be a valuable asset to your company and use this as an opportunity to grow and further the development of my career in trade business field. Thank you very much for considering my application for candidacy. >>correct I will follow up within a week to confirm that all of my materials were received and hopefully set up an interview time.>>I will follow up within a week to confirm that all of my materials were received and hopefully set up an interview.Sincerely, >>correct

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