Cramming #3
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I\'m really picky when it comes to movies. I consider a lot of factors when selecting a movie.
The harmony between plot, mise-en-scene and sound effect is really important.
Each movie has a unique message and atmosphere but those things can\'t exist alone. It necessarily needs harmony between a lot of visual, verbal factors. The main message of the movie can be delivered successfully when the harmony is beautiful.
For example, the movie \'Pan\'s labyrinth\' has a grotesque but beautiful mise-en-scene with vivid sound effects.
It also delivers its unique message by using a well-knit plot. Moreover, It contains a lot of metaphor including patience, hope, sacrifice in certain scenes. The movie sends a message after watching it and gives a fresh jolt.
But, the most important thing that I mainly consider is misogyny. If the movie contains misogyny, It makes me uncomfortable and upset because I think the way to describe a female character means the director\'s thought and perspective.
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~~Teacher Kate
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2. The harmony between the plot, mise-en-scene and sound effect is really important.
2. The harmony between the plot, mise-en-scene and sound effect is really important.
>>CORRECT!
3. Each movie has a unique message and atmosphere but those things can\'t exist alone. It necessarily needs harmony between a lot of visual, verbal factors. The main message of the movie can be delivered successfully when the harmony is beautiful.
3. Each movie has a unique message and atmosphere but those things can\'t exist alone. It necessarily needs harmony between a lot of visual, verbal factors. The main message of the movie can be delivered successfully when the harmony is beautiful.
>>CORRECT!
4. For example, the movie \'Pan\'s labyrinth\' has a grotesque but beautiful mise-en-scene with vivid sound effects.
4. For example, the movie \'Pan\'s labyrinth\' has a grotesque but beautiful mise-en-scene with vivid sound effects.
>>CORRECT!
5. It also delivers its unique message by using a well-knit plot. Moreover, It contains a lot of metaphor including patience, hope, sacrifice in certain scenes. The movie sends a message after watching it and gives a fresh jolt.
5. It also delivers its unique message by using a well-knit plot. Moreover, It contains a lot of metaphor including patience, hope, sacrifice in certain scenes. The movie sends a message after watching it and gives a fresh jolt.
>>CORRECT!
6. But, the most important thing that I mainly consider is misogyny. If the movie contains misogyny, It makes me uncomfortable and upset because I think the way to describe a female character means the director\'s thought and perspective.
6. But, the most important thing that I mainly consider is misogyny. If the movie contains misogyny, It makes me uncomfortable and upset because I think the way to describe a female character means the director\'s thought and perspective.
>>But, the most important thing that I mainly consider is misogyny. If the movie contains misogyny, It makes me uncomfortable and upset because I think the way a director describes a female character reflects his or her thoughts and perspective.
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