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2023-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 Jade

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What is your major, and why did you choose that major? My major is Computer Engineering and Computer teaching. I took it up at Dong-Eui University in Busan. From a young age, I have been interested in new things. I came to realize that I had to do something creative. Ever since I was a high school student, I\'ve always been passionate about computers and teaching. I knew that working in computer engineering could provide me with good prospects and allow me to express myself creatively through my thinking. After graduating from the university, I gained two years of hands-on experience in teaching junior and senior students regarding computer engineering.

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Good morning, [이름]! Thanks for completing this. Another piece of advice is to be familiar with the details needed when answering the question. Don\'t just memorize so you won\'t rattle in case of a mental block. Great job with this one! See you in our class. 
~ T. Jade^^
What is your major, and why did you choose that major?
My major is Computer Engineering and Computer Teaching. 
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I took it up at Dong-Eui University in Busan.
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From a young age, I have been interested in new things. 
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I came to realize that I had to do something creative.
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Ever since I was a high school student, I\'ve always been passionate about computers and teaching.
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I knew that working in computer engineering could provide me with good prospects and allow me to express myself creatively through my thinking.
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After graduating from the university, I gained two years of hands-on experience in teaching junior and senior students regarding computer engineering.
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>> OR: After graduating from the university, I gained two years of hands-on experience in teaching junior and senior students computer engineering.

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