Creative Writing 1

Hi, Lily!

You have a really good idea about the topic.

I think you are good at expressing yourself about different topics.

I appreciate your effort in doing your first homework. ^^

Have a nice day!

_Teacher Dianne

Q. It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Why?

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A. I disagree that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city.

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 There are some reasons why i think so.

>>  There are some reasons why I think so. (Grammatically correct. Just capitalize the letter I.) 
 Firstly,our society is very competitive. so children should learn about many things. 

>> Firstly, our society is very competitive, so children should learn about many things. (Grammatically correct. Be careful with punctuations.)
 Big city has a various facilities. Forexample, museum,academy,theater,convention and exhibition. They can learn many things there.

>> A big city has various facilities. For example, museum, academy, theater, convention, and exhibition. They can learn many things there.
 Second, experience is very important for children. In the city, they can meet various people and broden their perspectives.

>> Secondly, experience is very important for children. In the city, they can meet various people and broaden their perspectives.
 They will able to gain new experience. 

>> They will be able to gain new experiences.  
 Therefore, i think that it is better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside.

>> Therefore, I think that it is better for children to grow up in a big city than in the countryside. (Grammatically correct. Just capitalize the letter I.)