Creative Writing 2

Hi, Lily!

I\'m amazed how you stated your opinion about the topic.

You are an opinionated person.

Keep on sharing your ideas. ^^

Have a nice day!

_Teacher Dianne!

Q. In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not? 

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 A. I think this isn\'t good idea.

>> I think this isn\'t a good idea.
 There are some reasons why i think so. 

>>  There are some reasons why I think so. (Grammatically correct (Just capitalize \"I\")
 The first point i want to say is that the priority of students is to study.

>> The first point I want to say is that the priority of students is to study. (Grammatically correct. Just capitalize \"I\")

They have to study.

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If they have jobs, they will not have enough time to study. So that will ruin their school exam.

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 Secondly, I think students are immature and out of control. And they are not ready to work yet.

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If they study hard when they are teenagers, they will get a decent job.

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 Therefore, I think teenagers have to study and experience other things.

>> correct (Grammatically correct. Just put a comma after the word therefore. Therefore, I think teenagers have to study and experience other things. )