Crimes 2
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In your opinion, how can we eradicate petty crimes in society?
I would say that the society atmosphere is important. Severe crimes are quite affected by punishment, but as for petty crimes, moral sense can affect as well. If society has clear moral criteria and If it is highly recommended to members, It will effective to lessen minor crimes.
And another method I can mention is installing CCTV in where crimes happen a lot :)
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Good evening, Yu [이름]!
Thank you for answering the Composition question. :)
Here\'s my comments for your work:
Here\'s my comments for your work:
Question: In your opinion, how can we eradicate petty crimes in society?
Your answer: I would say that the society atmosphere is important. Severe crimes are quite affected by punishment, but as for petty crimes, moral sense can affect as well. If society has clear moral criteria and If it is highly recommended to members, It will effective to lessen minor crimes. And another method I can mention is installing CCTV in where crimes happen a lot :)
>> I would say that the society atmosphere is important. Severe crimes are quite affected by punishment, but as for petty crimes, moral sense can affect as well. If society has a clear moral criteria and if it is highly observed by the members of society, it will be an effective way to lessen minor crimes. Also, another method that I will mention is the installation of CCTV cameras in areas where crimes happen a lot.
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Loved your ideas! As you can see, only a few minor corrections, mostly on word/ phrase usage, punctuation and capitalization of words. Your ideas are coherent and you have expressed them very well. Kudos!
See you later in class!
~Miya^^
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