Crimes are bad but sometimes they can have reasons.

2014-01-17 · 첨삭 강사 Liza

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I can't understand why offenders commit crimes. Why offenders do bad behaviors? Some offenders have malevolence so they enjoy to commit crimes. However,other case of offenders commit crimes because of their inside story. Maybe their inside story was very urgent or emergent. Think about your mother is in emergency. Will you going nothing to do for your mother? If your mother is stunned, what will you do? Bring her to hosipital is not problem but when there was a traffic congestion, the situations may be changed. If my mother was in emergency, i might be broke the traiffic laws. Like this, if something important and crucial for me is in a dangerous situations, i can't think anything. I only think what i save.

강사 첨삭

Hello there, Bella!! ^_^

Thank you so much for doing yout homework.

I really appreciate all your efforts.

You are a very good student!

I really like the way you shared your ideas!

Wonderful! Oooppss! by the way, happy Friday!!

What are your plans?? Let\'s talk about it later!

I\'ll see you in class! Have a wonderful Friday night!

~Teacher May ^_^

 

By the way here are your corrections:

 

I can\'t understand why offenders commit crimes.

>> CORRECT!
Why offenders do bad behaviors?
>> Why offenders has bad behaviors?

Some offenders have malevolence so they enjoy to commit crimes.

>> Some offenders is malevolent, so they enjoy commiting crimes.

However,other case of offenders commit crimes because of their inside story.

>> CORRECT!
Maybe their inside story was very urgent or emergent.

>> Maybe, their inside story was very urgent or emergency.
Think about your mother is in emergency.

>> Think about it, what if your mother is in emergency?
Will you going nothing to do for your mother?
>> Will you do nothing for your mother?

If your mother is stunned, what will you do?

>> If your mother was stunned, what will you do?
Bring her to hosipital is not problem but when there was a traffic congestion, the situations may be changed.

>> Bringing her to the hospital is not a problem, but what if there was a traffic jam? The situation may be changed.
If my mother was in emergency, i might be broke the traiffic laws.
>> If my mother was in an emergency, I might broke the traffic laws.

Like this, if something important and crucial for me is in a dangerous situations,
i can\'t think anything. I only think what i save.

>> If an important person to me was in a dangerous situation, I couldn\'t think anything. I only think on how will I save him/her.

>>OR: If an important person to me was in danger, I couldn\'t think anything. I only think on how will I save him/her.

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