Current library system
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People can see improved technological skills all over the world nowadays.
>> Correct
It is not only for the factories of
technological devices, but also everywhere such as schools, offices, libraries and so on.
>> Correct
This essay will
discuss whether libraries should improve their technological resources or expend the places of a large
collection of paper books and I would express my opinion as well.
>> This essay will discuss whether libraries should improve their technological resources or expand the places for a large collection of paper books and I would express my opinion as well.
When people think about a normal library, people expect many paper books and quiet places for study.
>> Correct
However, there are less people go to libraries than before.
>> However, there are less people who go to libraries than before.
People search the Internet for books and
information.
>> Correct
Moreover, these days, people can buy second-hand books with cheap prices.
>> Moreover, these days, people can buy second-hand books at cheap prices.
Many people do
not feel necessary of borrowing books from libraries anymore.
>> Many people do not feel that it\'s necessary to borrow books from libraries anymore.
Therefore, people think libraries should
transform their structures and should follow the trend which people want some technological resources in
libraries.
>> Therefore, people think libraries should transform their structures and should follow the trend where people want some technological resources in libraries.
They insist that if current libraries do not change their forms, they would disappear within a decade.
>> Correct
Nevertheless, there are people who want to read paper books originally and do not agree that libraries will
disappear soon.
>> Correct
This is because that they think that people would still want the places like library.
>> This is because they think that people would still want places like libraries.
Moreover,
they think the government should expend the places for paper books.
>> Moreover, they think the government should expand the places for paper books.
In my view, we need to count about the benefits from current library system.
>> In my view, we need to count the benefits we get from the current library system.
I do not think that the copy of
many books is good for environment since we should cut many trees.
>> I do not think that making copies of many books is good for the environment since we have to cut many trees.
At the same time, the building new
collections of paper books would be unnecessary if technological resource can replace paper books.
>> At the same time, building new collections of paper books would be unnecessary if technological resources can replace paper books.
Therefore, I think that it is a waste resource for building structures and copying many paper books.
>> Therefore, I think that it is a waste of resources to build structures and make many copies of paper books.
People
should develop the technological resources for substituting paper books.
>> Correct
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