Customer realtionship
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My boss wants to do value selling. However, value sales are very difficult in Korea. Because our country is small. We have 45 university hospitals and 200 general hospitals and thousands of clinics. I think, your country is bigger than our country. so your country market is bigger than us too. and our product is for university and general hospital. so market is very small. if I visit this hospitals per 1 year, maybe I will visit all. however our sales team consist of 5 persons. so we have to divide this hospitals, then it will be decreased to visit hospital per person.
that is our situation. I think, we need best relationship with this customers. I have a good relationship with customer and our competitor also have a relation with same customer. but when it is decision time, who was a good relationship with customer, we know.
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T. DON
>> CORRECT
However, value sales are very
difficult in Korea. Because our country is small.
>> However, value sales are very
difficult in Korea because our country is small.
We have 45 university
hospitals and 200 general hospitals and thousands of clinics.
>> CORRECT
I think,
your country is bigger than our country. so your country market is
bigger than us too. and our product is for university and general
hospital. so market is very small.
>> I think your country is bigger than our country so your country\'s hospital market is
bigger than us and our products are for university and general
hospital so the market is very small.
If I visit this hospitals per 1 year,
maybe I will visit all. however our sales team consist of 5 persons. so
we have to divide this hospitals, then it will be decreased to visit
hospital per person.
>> If I visit these hospitals per year,
maybe I will visit all of them. However, our sales team consists of 5 people, so
we have to divide these hospitals, then it will be lesser for the sales team to visit
these hospitals per person.
that is our situation. I think, we need best relationship with this
customers. I have a good relationship with customer and our competitor
also have a relation with same customer. but when it is decision time,
who was a good relationship with customer, we know.
>> That is our current situation now. I think, we need the best relationship with these customers. I have a good relationship with customers and our competitors
also have a relationship with the customers that I have but when it is time for the customers to make a decision, who has a better and closer relationship, we know it.
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