Cyber bullying
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There are various kinds of bullying around us.
Today, I would like to mention cyber bullying.
Cyber bullying is a type of bullying that occurs artfully on e-mail, SNS, and mobile phones.
I am worried about it.
Exactly this is a big problem for our society.
To be precise, Cyber bullying is not a problem for me to worry about it, but a big problem for our society as a whole.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] Ha!
I would have loved it if you included concrete examples.
I want to hear more of your points on cyber bullying.
Lat\'s discuss further.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
There are various kinds of bullying around us.
>> Correct
Today, I would like to mention cyber bullying.
Today, I would like to mention cyber bullying.
>> Correct
Cyber bullying is a type of bullying that occurs artfully on e-mail, SNS, and mobile phones.
Cyber bullying is a type of bullying that occurs artfully on e-mail, SNS, and mobile phones.
>> Correct
I am worried about it.
I am worried about it.
>> Correct
Exactly this is a big problem for our society.
Exactly this is a big problem for our society.
>> Specifically, this is a big problem for our society.
To be precise, Cyber bullying is not a problem for me to worry about it, but a big problem for our society as a whole.
To be precise, Cyber bullying is not a problem for me to worry about it, but a big problem for our society as a whole.
>> To be precise, cyber bullying is not a problem for me to worry about but a big problem for our society as a whole.
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