cyber security is important

2019-03-05 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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It is important to protect cyber security. South Korea is also trying to protect cyber security. I\'m going to create a security program. They also make bills. People will have to give up some information. It is because it is too inefficient to keep simple information such as phone numbers and names.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Your essay for tonight is impressive!

I\'m happy about it. ^_^
Thank you for writing.

I agree that cyber security should be maintained especially in this day and age where computers and smartphones are like our life lines. :)
I hope you\'re having a great night.
See you again on Thursday.

~Teacher Charry :)

It is important to protect cyber security.

>> CORRECT!
South Korea is also trying to protect cyber security.

>> CORRECT!
I\'m going to create a security program.

>> CORRECT!
They also make bills.

>> CORRECT!
People will have to give up some information.

>> CORRECT!
It is because it is too inefficient to keep simple information such as phone numbers and names.

>> CORRECT!

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