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I met my boyfriend. It's been 9days since the last time we met. We were supposed to meet on this weekend because of his duty on a lawcourt and my study for an exam. But..we both felt waiting for two weeks seems pretty long and hard. So, he applied for his day-off to the lawcourt to meet me. He gave me a rose after I met him. It was romantic. So I felt so happy. but, the feeling of happiness didn't last on. We went to Mr pizza for lunch.While we were eating, he told me that he's going to Canada for studying abroad next Jan. He said that very calmly.. like it doesnt very matter. But,it really matter for me even if it is the matter that will happen in 6month. Because of my situation that I have to prepare for an exam, we can't meet as aften as other couple meet. I was so thankful to him for understanding not seeing me often. but, Actually..I was being swayed by him and affected so I couldn't concentrate on studying after I was in relationship with him. But, after I heard it from him. I realized what's important to me right now. I thought our relationship will last like forever. Cuz I am a type of person who are very considerate to start relationship with someone but when I start, I am so loyal.. and have a tendancy to put off other things to do. So I was really affected by him. But what if he leaves me after he go to Canada? what's left to me? So, that makes me realized being an independent and competent person is the prior to me. And I will try not to fall in him deeply and won't worry about future thing on us. well I'm going to Library now!
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Hi there, [이름]!
Thank you for your composition today. You must be really melancholic. I am really sorry about the bad news you got from your boyfriend. It\'s really difficult to be in that kind of situation. I hope that you can overcome that trial in your relationship. Be strong and hold on to your faith and love for each other. Look at the brighter side and take this achallenge that will strengthen your relationship. You can do it! Take care and have a nice day!
T. JanE ^^
I met my boyfriend.
>> Correct
It\'s been 9 days since the last time we met.
>> Correct
We were supposed to meet on this weekend because of his duty on a lawcourt and my study for an exam.
>> We were supposed to meet this weekend because of his duty in the lawcourt and because I\'m studying for my exam.
But..we both felt waiting for two weeks seems pretty long and hard.
>> However, we felt that waiting for two weeks is pretty long and hard.
So, he applied for his day-off to the lawcourt to meet me.
>> So, he applied for his day off from the lawcourt to meet me.
He gave me a rose after I met him.
>> Correct
It was romantic.
>> Correct
So I felt so happy.
>> Correct
But, the feeling of happiness didn\'t last on.
>> Correct
We went to Mr. pizza for lunch.
>> Correct
While we were eating, he told me that he\'s going to Canada for studying abroad next Jan.
>> While we were eating, he told me that he\'s going to Canada in January to study.
He said that very calmly.. like it doesnt very matter.
>> He said that very calmly, like it doesn\'t really matter.
But,it really matter for me even if it is the matter that will happen in 6month.
>> But it really matters to me even if it is a matter to deal with after 6 months.
Because of my situation that I have to prepare for an exam, we can\'t meet as aften as other couple meet.
>> Because I have to prepare for an exam, we can\'t meet as often as other couples do.
I was so thankful to him for understanding not seeing me often.
>> I am so thankful to him for understanding that I can\'t see him often.
but, Actually..I was beeing swayed by him and affected so I couldn\'t concentrate on studying after I was in relationship with him.
>> Actually, I am being swayed and affected by him since we get into a relationship, so I can\'t concentrate on studying.
But, after I heard it from him. I realized what\'s important to me right now.
>> But after I heard the news from him, I realized what\'s important to me right now.
I thought out relationship will last like forever.
>> Correct
Cuz I am a type of person who are very considerate to start relationship with someone but when I start, I am so loyal
>> I\'m the type of person who is very considerate and when I get into a relationship with someone, I am so loyal.
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