Damages of typhoon

2010-09-08 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

학생이 쓴 원문

A short time ago, typhoon that is 'Gonpas'came in Korea. I heard this news from TV. When I slept, rains began to fall,then,winds became stronger.I met the Gonpas.The sounds of typhoon was so loud,and had great power, as if it destroy many facilities.I surprised.SO I couldn't sleep well, I might spend time as open my eyes.And next morning, I watched news,that annouced about 'Gonpas', and its damages. It destroyed many house and facilities on the underground,and because of the wind,it make hard to move, so people felt fear of 'Gonpas'.And some people was confined by the river which suddenly become inundate.Except these phenomenon, there were many things.I hope, bad accidents never happens any more, because of the typhoon.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름], I’m so sorry to hear about the damages made by the typhoon. I hope everything will be fine. See you tonight, Connie A short time ago, typhoon that is 'Gonpas'came in Korea. >> Not too long ago, typhoon “Gonpas” passed by Korea.  I heard this news from TV. >> Correct When I slept, rains began to fall ,then, winds became stronger. >> When I was about to sleep, the rain began to fall and the wind became stronger. I met the Gonpas. >> That was Gonpas. The sounds of typhoon was so loud,and had great power, as if it destroy many facilities. >> The typhoon was so strong that it destroyed many facilities. I surprised.SO I couldn't sleep well, I might spend time as open my eyes. >> I was so surprised, I couldn’t sleep well, I spent most of the night with my eyes opened. And next morning, I watched news,that annouced about 'Gonpas', and its damages. >> The next morning, I watched he news about Gonpas and all it’s damages. It destroyed many house and facilities on the underground,and because of the wind,it make hard to move, so people felt fear of 'Gonpas'. >> It destroyed many houses and facilities under ground and because of the of the strong winds people were scared of “Gonpas”. And some people was confined by the river which suddenly become inundate. >> Some people were confined due to the flooded river. Except these phenomenon, there were many things.I hope, bad accidents never happens any more, because of the typhoon. >> Due to this natural disaster, a lot of things happened. I hope, bad accidents will never happen anymore, because of the typhoon.

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