Dangers of being a conformist.

2020-02-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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There are several reasons why being a conformist is dangerous. First of all, conformist mentality is detrimental to a society. On the individual level, being apathetic to public matters can be a coping mechanism. In modern society, people endure diverse hardships throughout their daily life. They have to constatly make a decision after another in order to survive in this ever-changing world. So, it is totally understandable that they just don\'t have enough room to care for public affairs. One can even say that people are forced to become conformists. Nevertheless, it should be pointed out that most difficulties, by which individuals are harassed, stem from a society\'s structural problems. For instance, a number of people fail to get regular jobs though they tried really hard. But unemployment is not an issue which can be resolved by individuals\' efforts. Without voicing themselves as a group to their society, more people will be helplessly burnt-out and the society will never change.

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Being a conformist or what we also call \"sheep like belief\". An example worth noting would be the religious extremists. These people have conformed to a particular ideal out of fear and they accept their cause based on blind faith. They will follow instructions without question and carry out horrible acts in the name of conformity. ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah 

There are several reasons why being a conformist is dangerous. 
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First of all, conformist mentality is detrimental to a society. 
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On the individual level, being apathetic to public matters can be a coping mechanism. 
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In modern society, people endure diverse hardships throughout their daily life. 
>>CORRECT (...their daily lives.)
They have to constatly make a decision after another in order to survive in this ever-changing world. 
>>They have to constantly make a decision one after another in order to survive in this ever-changing world.
So, it is totally understandable that they just don\'t have enough room to care for public affairs. 
>>CORRECT
One can even say that people are forced to become conformists. 
>>CORRECT
Nevertheless, it should be pointed out that most difficulties, by which individuals are harassed, stem from a society\'s structural problems. 
>>CORRECT
For instance, a number of people fail to get regular jobs though they tried really hard. 
>>CORRECT
But unemployment is not an issue which can be resolved by individuals\' efforts. 
>>CORRECT
Without voicing themselves as a group to their society, more people will be helplessly burnt-out and the society will never change.
>>CORRECT

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