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Today, I went to a museum which had art and many other great things from davinci. Also, I went to a war museum too! Especially the 2nd Yeon Proung fight, 6 Korean soldiers had died. They weren't afraid. They were brave. Even after 58 days, the person who moves the ship was gripping the steer wheel in a same act. Also, other people who died, some also gripped guns or other things. out of 29 people 6 had died. 5 had died immediately, 1 had died after 84 days of fight from his injury
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Hello Joey,
It seems like you are going to a lot of museums and historical places nowadays. Talk to you later.
-RJ
Today, I went to a museum which had art and many other great things from davinci. >>Today, I went to a museum which had art and many other great works from Da Vinci.
Also, I went to a war museum too!
>>I also went to a war museum.
Especially the 2nd Yeon Proung fight, 6 Korean soldiers had died.
>>Especially the 2nd Yeon Pyeong fight, 6 Korean soldiers had died.
They weren't afraid. They were brave.
>>correct
Even after 58 days, the person who moves the ship was gripping the steer wheel in a same act.
>>Even after 58 days, the person who was steering the ship was in the same manner.
Also, other people who died, some also gripped guns or other things.
>>The other people who died also gripped guns or other things.
out of 29 people 6 had died. 5 had died immediately, 1 had died after 84 days of fight from his injury
>>Out of 29 people, 6 had died. 5 had died immediately, while1 died after 84 days because of his injury from the fight.
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