Day 2 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
My new year\'s ultimate goal is to improve my English skills and settle down in Canada stably. I want to make friends from different countries and get a job there through a Working Holiday Visa, as it will help me gain diverse experiences.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]ny!^^
Thank you for completing your first composition, and sharing your goal for this year!~
Chammy
My new year\'s ultimate goal is to improve my English skills and settle down in Canada stably.
>> My ultimate goal for the new year is to improve my English skills and settle down in Canada
I want to make friends from different countries and get a job there through a Working Holiday Visa, as it will help me gain diverse experiences.
>> I want to make friends from different countries and get a job there through a Working Holiday Visa which will help me gain diverse experiences.
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