day 4_ homework

2018-04-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

What changes would you like to see science make to the world? Answer in 5 sentences or more. l saw a news article that it will develop eye water for eyesight fastly so, l'm expected the eye water. l got a LASEK surgery 2years ago. however these days my eyesight is getting worse. l'm really worry about that. l think those reason is that always use phone, computer and reading books so many time.

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday [이름]!

I\'m glad you\'re coming out strong as ever.

Thank you for your composition today.

This will set as a bar for the whole week.

Take note of the corrections!

I\'ll talk to you later.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

l saw a news article that it will develop eye water for eyesight fastly

>> l saw a news article that they will develop eye liquid to improve eyesight quickly.
so, l\'m expected the eye water.

>> I\'m really looking forward to this liquid being invented.
l got a LASEK surgery 2years ago.

>> l got a LASEK surgery 2 years ago.
however these days my eyesight is getting worse.

>> However these days my eyesight is getting worse.
l\'m really worry about that.

>> I\'m really worried about that.
l think those reason is that always use phone, computer and reading books so many time.

>> l think this is caused by me always using my phone, computer and reading books for a long time.

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