Day1_facing challenges
학생이 쓴 원문
Q. Some people think that facing challenges improves a person. Do you agree or disagree?
I agree today’s topic. Because I experienced it firsthand. Of course there are so many ways to improve person. Nevertheless facing challenges improves a person is clear. I can tell the story that my experience. When I first learned English. I was nervous and scared that I am not good at English. Therefore, I had a tinge of English even thought I want good at English. One day, I saw a video which is “How can I be good at English?”. The speaker in the video said that speaking is very important.
First I heard that, I though I cannot. Because that is biggest challenge for me. But I really wanted good at English. So I was facing speaking. Now, I do not have nervous when speaking English and my skills have improved more than before.
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I agree today’s topic.
>>> I agree with today\'s topic.
Because I experienced it firsthand.
>>> CORRECT!
Of course there are so many ways to improve person.
>>> Of course, there are many ways to improve people.
Nevertheless facing challenges improves a person is clear.
>>> CORRECT!
OR: Nevertheless, it is clear that facing challenges will improve people.
I can tell the story that my experience.
>>> I can share an experience I had.
When I first learned English.
>>> CORRECT!
I was nervous and scared that I am not good at English.
>>> CORRECT!
Therefore, I had a tinge of English even thought I want good at English.
>>> So, I felt a tinge that I even thought I wanted to be good at English.
One day, I saw a video which is “How can I be good at English?”.
>>> CORRECT!
OR: One day, I watched a video called \"How can I be good at English?\"
The speaker in the video said that speaking is very important.
>>> CORRECT!
First I heard that, I though I cannot.
>>> It was my first time to hear about it and I thought of it.
Because that is biggest challenge for me.
>>> Because it is the biggest challenge for me.
But I really wanted good at English.
>>> But I wanted to be good at English.
So I was facing speaking.
>>> So I faced what I was saying.
Now, I do not have nervous when speaking English and my skills have improved more than before.
>>> Now, I\'m not nervous when speaking English and I\'m doing much better than before.
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