Dealing with pandemics well is the most important and effective way to make pandemics optional, not

2020-04-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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Dealing with pandemics well is the most important and effective way to make pandemics optional, not inevitable. Then you\'ll ask me what it is to handle well and how to handle pandemics well. The authority must learn lessons from past pandemics and prepare a thorough system. People can more easily treat new pandemics if the system is already prepared properly. Firstly, the system should include broadcasting guidelines. When a new pandemic is prevalent, the public will focus on the news which informs safety rules and sources of infection. Even if the news reports the situation correctly, the spread of infection will slow down. Secondly, the system must include commitments to financial support for medical staff and researchers. The more support there is for them, the more likely it is for patients to be treated and vaccines to be developed. If the system is qualified for at least these 2 things before the new pandemic\'s outbreak, pandemics will no longer be inevitable, but optional.

강사 첨삭

Hi Su [이름]! Thank you for investing a little of your time with your homework. I really appreciate the effort. ^ ^
I definitely agree with you; we should always learn from the past. We are now aware that new strains of viruses may occur in the future, at least preparedness and readiness to respond to such occurrence is crucial.
-Teacher Jedah

Dealing with pandemics well is the most important and effective way to make pandemics optional, not inevitable. 
>>CORRECT
Then you\'ll ask me what it is to handle well and how to handle pandemics well. 
>>Then you\'ll ask me what and how can we handle it well.
The authority must learn lessons from past pandemics and prepare a thorough system. 
>>CORRECT
People can more easily treat new pandemics if the system is already prepared properly. 
>>CORRECT
Firstly, the system should include broadcasting guidelines. 
>>CORRECT
When a new pandemic is prevalent, the public will focus on the news which informs safety rules and sources of infection. 
>>CORRECT
Even if the news reports the situation correctly, the spread of infection will slow down. 
>>If the news reports the situation correctly, the spread of infection will slow down.
Secondly, the system must include commitments to financial support for medical staff and researchers. 
>>CORRECT
The more support there is for them, the more likely it is for patients to be treated and vaccines to be developed. 
>>CORRECT
If the system is qualified for at least these 2 things before the new pandemic\'s outbreak, pandemics will no longer be inevitable, but optional.
>>If the system has at least these two things well established before the outbreak, pandemics will no longer be inevitable, but optional.

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