Dear beautiful jessica!!^^*

2010-10-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jessica

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The weather is very cold. So, I wore five kinds of clothing superimposed. It's underwear, T-shirts, shirts, vests and jacket. Nevertheless, the cold^^;; Last class, you gave me a question. I will tell you in my opinion Capital punishment is the most severe punishment,It means the death. I think it is necessary for good citizen and scare to criminal. However, not wishing to be executed. I wish it never happened running.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Mi [이름]..You have the idea about capital punishment. And to be honest, I do not agree with this.  Maybe it is better, if the government will just  impose a new law about this like lifetime imprisonment. Anyways, nice composition, see you tomorrow.   The weather is very cold. >>>correct sentence So, I wore five kinds of clothing superimposed. >>>So, I wore five pieces of clothing. It's underwear, T-shirts, shirts, vests and jacket. >>>I wore underwear, T-shirts, shirt, vest and jacket. Nevertheless, the cold^^;; >>>But still, it's cold. Last class, you gave me a question. >>>You gave me a question form our last class. I will tell you in my opinion >>>I wil tell you my opinion. Capital punishment is the most severe punishment,It means the death. >>>Capital punishment is kiling a person who commits offensive crimes. I think it is necessary for good citizen and scare to criminal. >>>I think, it is necessary for the people to be a good citizen and to scare criminals. However, not wishing to be executed. >>>However, I don't wish someone to  be executed. I wish it never happened running. >>>I wish it will never happen.

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