Dear. Christine

2011-04-28 · 첨삭 강사 Christine

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Q: For the last 10 years of your life, can you tell me what were your major achievements? Yes I can, For the last 10 years of my life my major achievements is dream. Honestly, I don't have clearly achievement not yet. But I found that I eager for one's goal in my life. I really want to be a flight attendant so I work hard to achieve my goals because of my dream. If depends on how hard I try but I believe that If I tried hard ar it, I'm sure I can. Actually most of people live without their's dream or goal in life and they couldn't happy even if they have a nice job. So I would you say that finding for my dream is major achievements in my life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there,

        Thank you for this composition. I believe that our goals are the anchors of our existence. People can't be successful if they don't know what they want. Keep dreaming! Aja!

Q: For the last 10 years of your life, can you tell me what were your major achievements?
>>Correct
Yes I can, For the last 10 years of my life my major achievements is dream.

>>Yes, for the last 10 years of my life my major achievement is finally realizing my dream in life.

 Honestly, I don't have clearly achievement not yet.

>> Honestly, I don't have a clear achievement yet.
But I found that I eager for one's goal in my life.

>>But I found out that I am eager to achieve my goal in life.
I really want to be a flight attendant so I work hard to achieve my goals because of my dream.

>> Correct.

 If depends on how hard I try but I believe that If I tried hard ar it, I'm sure I can.

>>It depends on how hard I try but I believe that if I tried hard to do it, I'm sure I can.
Actually most of people live without their's dream or goal in life and they couldn't happy even if they have a nice job.

>> Actually, most people live without being able to pursue their dreams or goals in life and they could not be happy even if they have a nice job.
So I would you say that finding for my dream is major achievements in my life.

>> So, I would say that being able to realize my dream is my major achievement in life.

>>So I would you say that having my dream is my major achievement in my life.

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