Dear [Name],

2010-04-19 · 첨삭 강사 lirah

학생이 쓴 원문

It's Sunday. I hope you had a wonderful weekend. Well, let's continue the previous story. The episode's title is Cradle to Grave. The story was an investigation about serial killer who impregnates young women and murders them after they have given birth. BAU who's an investigation team of FBI found the bay is still alive and they let the parents of one victim know. To my surprise, the parents wanted to raise that baby even if the baby's father is a murderer who killed their daughter. I don't have a baby yet, so I don’t know mother’s feeling. But I know I never could do that. Condemn the offense and not its perpetrator. I know rationally children are innocent but can't accept emotionally. I'm sorry that I could not explain my feeling well. Well, what do you think about this?

강사 첨삭

Dear [Name],   Wow, this story is really fascinating and it makes me think deeply. In my opinion, I think that the baby is a victim as well. The baby was just caught in an ugly situation and it's going to be inhumane not to take care of the baby. Even though the baby's biological father is a lunatic criminal, it is not the baby's fault that he is the result of an evil act. So in my case I would do the same thing as the parents did in this story because the baby will always carry a part of my daughter in his blood and genes. I will raise the baby in a nice way so that he can become a good citizen. Often times people become criminals because of their environment and because of some traumatic childhood experiences.   I like the story, it is really interesting. Thank you for sharing it with me. Have a wonderful day!   Sincerely yours,T. Lirah   It's Sunday. I hope you had a wonderful weekend.>>It's Sunday. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend.Well, let's continue the previous story. >>CorrectThe episode's title is Cradle to Grave. >>CorrectThe Correctstory was an investigation about serial killer who impregnates young women and murders them after they have given birth. >>The story was an investigation about a serial killer who impregnates young women and murders them after they have given birth. BAU who's an investigation team of FBI found the bay is still alive and they let the parents of one victim know. >>BAU who's an investigation team of the FBI found a bayby and he is still alive, they let the parents of one of the victims know about this. To my surprise, the parents wanted to raise that baby even if the baby's father is a murderer who killed their daughter. >>To my surprise, the parents of the victim wanted to raise the baby even if the baby's father is a murderer who killed their daughter.I don't have a baby yet, so I don’t know mother’s feeling. >>I don't have a baby yet, so I don’t know how a  mother would feel about this. But I know I never could do that. >>But I know I could never do that.Condemn the offense and not its perpetrator. >>CorrectI know rationally children are innocent but can't accept emotionally. >>Rationally, I know that the child is innocent but I can't accept this situation emotionally. I'm sorry that I could not explain my feeling well. >>I'm sorry if I could not explain my feelings well. Well, what do you think about this? >>Correct

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