Dear [Name],
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We talked about the yellow dust. I couldn’t response about that this morning.
Actually I’ve not ever thought about the yellow dust in Japan.
When I was in Korea, I thought it was terrible condition. But after coming here, I didn’t consider it because I guess pollen disease is more serious in Japan. Many people prepare a mask in spring.
We can see the polluted air by pollen. After coming back home, we should wash hands clean and gargle.
Oh, I searched about the yellow dust also. There is the yellow dust problem in Japan.
Is there a same phenomenon in your country?
By the way, as I wrote another composition, I’ll register a 20 minutes-class. I don’t know who will be my teacher. But I would like to talk to you again. See you.
Best regards,
[이름]
강사 첨삭
Hi Joo Yun!
I am [Name] Jazz and I'll be checking your compositions. Please don't be shy to write more about your ideas. Have a wonderful day!
Jazz ^^
We talked about the yellow dust.
>>correct
I couldn't response about that this morning.
>>I couldn't respond about that this morning.
Actually, I've not ever thought about the yellow dust in Japan.
Actually, I've never thought about the yellow dust in Japan.
When I was in Korea, I thought it was terrible condition.
>>When I was in Korea, I thought that it was a terrible condition.
But after coming here, I didn't consider it because I guess pollen disease is more serious in Japan.
>>But when I came here, I guess hay fever is more serious in Japan.
Many people prepare a mask in spring.
>>correct
We can see the polluted air by pollen.
>>We can see the air polluted with pollen.
After coming back home, we should wash hands clean and gargle.
>>When we get back home, we should wash our hands and we should gargle.
Oh, I searched about the yellow dust also.
>>Oh, I also searched about yellow dust.
There is the yellow dust problem in Japan.
>>There is a yellow dust problem in Japan.
Is there a same phenomenon in your country?
>>Is there a similar phenomenon in your country?
By the way, as I wrote another composition, I'll register a 20 minutes-class.
>>By the way, as I wrote another composition, I registered a 20-minute class.
I don't know who will be my teacher. But I would like to talk to you again.
>>I don't know who will my teacher be, but I would like to talk to you again.
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