Dear [Name]

2012-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Speaking of ADHD, I've also heard that before through a newepaper. Some kids got used to using smartphone or tablet PC even before acquainting their own mother tongue. Moreover, some kids got anxious and irritated when their parents moved that away. What's more interesting, when their parents gave them a picture book, they became curious first but after touching the book as if they were using an electronic gadget, and recognizing that's not what they want, they just kick that away. It's very useful and helpful to use electronic devices these days. I've also used a laptop computer, MP3 player, electronic dictionary, smartphone, and GPS navigation while I'm driving. Without these instruments, my life was totally difference I guess. You know what? There's Korean saying: Too much is as bad as too little. That's easier said than done though, all we have to do is use them in moderation I think. See you tomorrow afternoon. Catch you later. Written by:[이름]

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Hello there [이름],               Nice thoughts about electronic gadgets. I think they have advantages and disadvantages as we have discussed. Thanks for your composition. see you tomorrow! -Teacher Verna- Speaking of ADHD, I\'ve also heard that before through a newspaper. >>Correct Some kids got used to using smartphone or tablet PC even before acquainting their own mother tongue. >>Correct Moreover, some kids got anxious and irritated when their parents moved that away. >>Moreover, some kids got anxious and irritated when their parents move that away. What\'s more interesting, when their parents gave them a picture book, they became curious first but after touching the book as if they were using an electronic gadget, and recognizing that\'s not what they want, they just kick that away. >>CorrectIt\'s very useful and helpful to use electronic devices these days. >>Correct I\'ve also used a laptop computer, MP3 player, electronic dictionary, smartphone, and GPS navigation while I\'m driving. >>Correct  Without these instruments, my life was totally difference I guess. >>Without these instruments, my life was totally different I guess. You know what? >>Correct There\'s Korean saying: Too much is as bad as too little. >>Correct That\'s easier said than done though, all we have to do is use them in moderation I think. >>Correct See you tomorrow afternoon. >>Correct Catch you later. >>CorrectWritten by:[이름]

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