Dear [Name]
학생이 쓴 원문
Thanks God It's Friday!! Also Buddha's Birthday, we can enjoy additional holiday, next Monday. I should have asked you if you have any special plans.
Any way, do whatever you want as much as you can during this short break.
Speaking of Buddhism, it was very popular in Goryeo, which was ancient country in Korean peninsular 10th century. That's why many Buddhist temples were located in almost every town and village. However, after Goryeo collapsed in the late 14th century, the Joseon Dynasty was founded in AD 1392. At that time, people began to believe confucianism as the state religion. So Buddhism were intensively persecuted. That is the main reason why Buddhism temples are all located in the middle of mountains currently.
But these days no one persecutes Buddhism and any other religions in Korea. If you have a chance, visit Buddhist temples. You're not gonna regret at all. See you next Tuesday. Bye. Written by : [이름]
강사 첨삭
Hi there [이름],
Thank you for the invitation. I\'m really happy to receive your message. If I don\'t know yo, I would think you are a Buddhist. :D Take care! Enjoy the weekend!
-Teacher Verna-
Thanks God It\'s Friday!!
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Also Buddha\'s Birthday, we can enjoy additional holiday, next Monday.
>>And it is also Buddha\'s birthday so we can enjoy additional holiday, next Monday.
I should have asked you if you have any special plans.
>>CorrectAnyway, do whatever you want as much as you can during this short break. >>CorrectSpeaking of Buddhism, it was very popular in Goryeo, which was ancient country in Korean peninsular 10th century.
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That\'s why many Buddhist temples were located in almost every town and village.
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However, after Goryeo collapsed in the late 14th century, the Joseon Dynasty was founded in AD 1392.
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At that time, people began to believe confucianism as the state religion.
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So Buddhism were intensively persecuted.
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That is the main reason why Buddhism temples are all located in the middle of mountains currently. >>That is the main reason why Buddhist temples are all located in the middle of mountains currently. But these days no one persecutes Buddhism and any other religions in Korea.
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If you have a chance, visit Buddhist temples.
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You\'re not gonna regret at all.
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See you next Tuesday.
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Bye. Written by : [이름]
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