Dear [Name]

2012-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi, happy thursday. We have one more day left until this fabulous weekend. I'm very curious what you're gonna do this weekend. In my case, I'll hit the books during whole weekend. ^^ I mean I have to prepare for my final test in advance. Today, we talked about day-care center. I didn't ask you how day-care centers go on in your country. As I already mentioned, more and more women in Korea are working even after they bore their little babies and toddlers. In addition to, their grandparents also refuse to look after them. That's why it's totally hard to find vacancy in day-care center especially big cities like Seoul. I don't care whether moms work or not. If I were same situations, I'd rather take a break for a while in order to take good care of my baby. I'm not sure if my company waits for me or not, though. KK. I heard relationship with parents especially during infancy is as much important as breast feeding for baby's mental and physical health. -[이름]-

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름], 

           I think conversing with you is always sensible. I believe you are ready to be a parent. I could imagine how blessed your children would be to have you. ^^ Btw, I\'m going to tell you about kindergarten situation in the Philippines in the class. See you! :D

-Teacher Verna-

Hi, happy Thursday.

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We have one more day left until this fabulous weekend.

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I\'m very curious what you\'re gonna do this weekend.

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In my case, I\'ll hit the books during whole weekend. ^^

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I mean I have to prepare for my final test in advance. 

>>Correct

 Today, we talked about day-care center.

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I didn\'t ask you how day-care centers go on in your country.

>>Correct

As I already mentioned, more and more women in Korea are working even after they bore their little babies and toddlers.

>>Correct

In addition to, their grandparents also refuse to look after them.

>> In addition, their grandparents also refuse to look after them.

That\'s why it\'s totally hard to find vacancy in day-care center especially big cities like Seoul. 

>>Correct

I don\'t care whether moms work or not.

>>Correct

If I were same situations, I\'d rather take a break for a while in order to take good care of my baby.

>> If I were in the same situation, I\'d rather take a break for a while in order to take good care of my baby.

I\'m not sure if my company waits for me or not, though. KK.

>>Correct

I heard relationship with parents especially during infancy is as much important as breast feeding for baby\'s mental and physical health. -[이름]-

>>Correct

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