Dear [Name]

2012-06-05 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

Good to have you back. I couldn't help putting off our class yesterday due to my private reason. I missed you a lot. ^^ I have a brother, two years younger than me, getting married this Sunday. Since he was born in 1985, we had fought frequently each other. I even broke my guitar because I hit him by the guitar. He used to be my sandbag, target for B.B gun and counterpart in almost every sports we played togher. I had taken advantage of him when I needed him. However, he used to be the one who thought me as the best guy he's ever seen in this planet. Even if I got frustrated and failed, he would trust and count on me. If only I would have been better brother everyone was jealous of. I think I'm still not the best brother for him. I don't get in touch with him a lot by way of excuse of being hectic. From now on, I'm gonna try more so that our brotherhood lasts unconditionally. Enjoy your short break. Bye. Written by: [이름]

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름],

             Thank you for this composition. I hope your brother\'s wedding is going to be a great one. Let\'s talk about it on Thursday! Happy holiday!

-Teacher Verna-

Good to have you back.

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I couldn\'t help putting off our class yesterday due to my private reason. I missed you a lot. ^^

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 I have a brother, two years younger than me, he is getting married this Sunday. 

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Since he was born in 1985, we had fought frequently with each other.

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I even broke my guitar because I hit him by the guitar.

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He used to be my sandbag, target for B.B gun and counterpart in almost every sports we played togher.

>> He used to be my sandbag, target for B.B gun and counterpart in almost every sports we played together.

I had taken advantage of him when I needed him. 

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However, he used to be the one who thought me as the best guy he\'s ever seen in this planet.

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Even if I got frustrated and failed, he would trust and count on me.

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If only I would have been better brother everyone was jealous of.

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I think I\'m still not the best brother for him. I don\'t get in touch with him a lot by way of excuse of being hectic.

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From now on, I\'m gonna try more so that our brotherhood lasts unconditionally. Enjoy your short break. Bye. 

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Written by: [이름]

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