Dear [Name]
학생이 쓴 원문
Hi there!! I hope you enjoy the rest of day, though it's raining outside. Korean also have to go through monsoon, which is just around the corner. ^^
Come to think of it, it reminds me of my childhood especially elementary school.
When we were going to school in the rainy morning, every students were holding their colorful umbrellas. It looked very beautiful I remember.
Unfortunately, however, many students living in Korea suffer from stress caused by thier school lives. These days, economy situation is not good all over the world including Korea. Many young people who just graduated from their university can't find the way to make their living. That's why many parents who have their sons and daughters in high school cannot help force their children to study more. So there's no choice but studying for Korean students. They even don't know what they really like to do in the future. I don't know whose fault it is. It's all our bad I guess. Bye. [이름].
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름],
Thank you for your opinion about the education system. I hope in time it will change. Have a great afternoon.
~Teacher Verna~
Hi there!!
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I hope you enjoy the rest of day, though it\'s raining outside.
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Korean also have to go through monsoon, which is just around the corner. ^^
>>Korea also have to go through monsoon, which is just around the corner. ^^Come to think of it, it reminds me of my childhood especially elementary school.
>>Come to think of it, it reminds me of my childhood especially when I was elementary school student.When we were going to school in the rainy morning, every students were holding their colorful umbrellas.
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It looked very beautiful I remember. >>It looked beautiful as I remember it.Unfortunately, however, many students living in Korea suffer from stress caused by thier school lives.
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These days, economy situation is not good all over the world including Korea.
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Many young people who just graduated from their university can\'t find the way to make their living.
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That\'s why many parents who have their sons and daughters in high school cannot help force their children to study more.
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So there\'s no choice but studying for Korean students.
>>So there\'s no choice for Korean students but to study.
They even don\'t know what they really like to do in the future.
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I don\'t know whose fault it is. It\'s all our bad I guess.
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Bye.
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[이름].
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