Dear [Name]

2012-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

학생이 쓴 원문

What's up? I'm happy to hear you really enjoyed your meal with your husband. You seem to still love him. ^^ Don't take that the wrong way. It's just kidding. I'm really jealous you have someone to rely on and love unconditionally. KK We talked about North Korea again. When I was an elementary school student, there's a question on exam: 'What is the wish we have longed for?' 'The answer was peaceful reunification.' However, the more North Korea provoke in some ways, the worse our relationship become. It's getting difficult to acheive reunification. What's more, young students don't want to be reunified any more. What a sad thing it is! If we had been reunified, I wouldn't have participated in military service. Every year, so much money is being spent on military facilities. Otherwise, it could be used to something else such as welfare, education, culture, and infrastructures for people. Anyway, have a nice day. ^^ See you later alligator in a while crocodile.

강사 첨삭

Hello!

I have to admit that it takes time and effort to write not only a sentence but a paragraph.

I know that you be able to perfect writing with constant practice.

This will lead you to be a good English speaker as long as you will apply what you write when you talk.

You are a smart person and I believe in you!

T. Verna ~

What\'s up? I\'m happy to hear you really enjoyed your meal with your husband.

>>What\'s up? I\'m happy to hear you that you really enjoyed your meal with your husband.

You seem to still love him. ^^

>> CORRECT

>>OR You seem to be still in love with him.^^

Don\'t take that the wrong way.

>>Don\'t take it in a wrong way.

>>OR better: Don\'t take it negatively.

It\'s just kidding.

>>I\'m just kidding
I\'m really jealous you have someone to rely on and love unconditionally. KK

>> CORRECT..good construction here..
We talked about North Korea again.

>> CORRECT

When I was an elementary school student, there\'s a question on exam: \'What is the wish we have longed for?\'

>> CORRECT

\'The answer was peaceful reunification.\'

>>My answer was \'peaceful reunification.\'

However, the more North Korea provoke in some ways, the worse our relationship become.

>> However, the more North Korea provoke in some ways, the worst our relationship would become.

It\'s getting difficult to achieve reunification.

>> CORRECT

What\'s more, young students don\'t want to be reunified any more.

>> CORRECT

What a sad thing it is!

>> CORRECT

>>OR This is a sad thing!

If we had been reunified, I wouldn\'t have participated in military service.

>> If we had been reunified, I wouldn\'t have participated in the military service.

Every year, so much money is being spent on military facilities.

>> CORRECT..good construction here..

Otherwise, it could be used to something else such as welfare, education, culture, and infrastructures for people.

>> CORRECT..good vocabulary~..

Anyway, have a nice day. ^^

>> CORRECT

See you later alligator in a while crocodile.

>> CORRECT

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