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Hello again. It's sticky, sweaty, gotta-get-to-water weather these days. I'm having two air conditioners turned on in my office right now. Today, we talked about suicide of celebrities in Korea. There are so many causes for that though, I guess malicious online comments are the most influential cause. Before the internet developed, it's rare for us to see celebrities commiting suicide. Of course, some freaky fans used to send cursing letters with miserable pictures and broken mirrors. However, that wasn't compared to be current cyber attack. It's much more convenient, faster, and effective than any other method. They can even be allowed to keep theirselves anonymous through the internet. That's why people comment anything about celebrities more easily and thoughtlessly. Just by following other people's comments, without consideration, they do someting wrong to celebrities. The celebrities who get hurted by numerous people far more likely to end up commiting suicide.

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Hello again.

>>Hello again!

It\'s sticky, sweaty, gotta-get-to-water weather these days.

>>CORRECT

I\'m having two air conditioners turned on in my office right now.

>>CORRECT
Today, we talked about suicide of celebrities in Korea.

>>We talked about the suicide committed by one of the celebrities in Korea today.

There are so many causes for that though, I guess malicious online comments are the most influential cause.

>>CORRECT

Before the internet developed, it\'s rare for us to see celebrities commiting suicide.

>>Before the Internet was developed, it\'s rare for us to see celebrities committing suicide. 

Of course, some freaky fans used to send cursing letters with miserable pictures and broken mirrors.

>>CORRECT

However, that wasn\'t compared to be current cyber attack.

>>However, that wasn\'t compared to the current cyber attack.

It\'s much more convenient, faster, and effective than any other method.

>>CORRECT

They can even be allowed to keep theirselves anonymous through the internet.

>>They can even be allowed to keep their selves anonymous through the internet.

That\'s why people comment anything about celebrities more easily and thoughtlessly.

>>CORRECT

Just by following other people\'s comments, without consideration, they do someting wrong to celebrities.

>>Just by following other people\'s comments, without consideration, they do something wrong to celebrities.

The celebrities who get hurted by numerous people far more likely to end up commiting suicide.

>>The celebrities who got hurt by numerous people are more likely to end up committing suicide.