Dear [Name].

2012-09-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lara

학생이 쓴 원문

Happy thursday. We have only a day to hang in by happier weekend. I'm so hilarious to hear that you are absolutely satisfied with our talks. I still feel uncomfortable when it comes to speak English though, you always make me feel comfortable. That's all your effort. ^^ We talked about feminism. Unlike our mother's generation, most of women living nowadays have the same right as men. I think our mothers didn't want their daughters to suffer from any sexual discrimination they went through. That's why most of women are educated well thanks to their parents. So, many ladies play a major role in various sectors such as teaching students, designing products, and even training soldiers. Unfortunately(?) it's natural to share house chores between husbands and wives. Lara, enjoy the rest of the day. See you tomorrow afternoon. Ciao.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! I agree with your opinion. :) It is so true that today\'s generation is more advance as compared to our mothers\' generation. Us, women, are now more confident and competitive enough to do different jobs. See you tomorrow. ^^ Happy Thursday!

~T.Lara

Happy thursday.

>>CORRECT

We have only a day to hang in by happier weekend.

>>We only have a day to hang out and have a happier weekend.

I\'m so hilarious to hear that you are absolutely satisfied with our talks.

>>It is hilarious to hear that you are absolutely satisfied with our class.

I still feel uncomfortable when it comes to speak English though, you always make me feel comfortable.

>>I still feel uncomfortable speaking the English language but you always make me feel comfortable.

That\'s all your effort. ^^

>>Thanks for your effort.

 We talked about feminism.

>>Let\'s now talk about feminism.

Unlike our mother\'s generation, most of women living nowadays have the same right as men.

>>Unlike in our mother\'s generation, most of the women living nowadays have an equal rights as of the men.

I think our mothers didn\'t want their daughters to suffer from any sexual discrimination they went through.

>>I think our mothers don\'t want their daughters to suffer from any sexual discrimination that they went through.

That\'s why most of women are educated well thanks to their parents.

>>That\'s why most of the women are educated well, thanks to their parents.

So, many ladies play a major role in various sectors such as teaching students, designing products, and even training soldiers.

>>That said, a lot of ladies play a major role in various sectors such as teaching students, designing products, and even training soldiers.

Unfortunately(?) it\'s natural to share house chores between husbands and wives.

>>It\'s natural to share household chores between husbands and wives.

Lara, enjoy the rest of the day.

>>CORRECT

See you tomorrow afternoon. Ciao.

>>CORRECT

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