Dear [Name].

2012-09-11 · 첨삭 강사 Sheela

학생이 쓴 원문

I'm relieved because I can still talk to you, Lara, even though I couldn't help changing our class hour. We talked about corporal punishment at school. You know I'm working at new Hakwon. My new students are much more weak than previous students I taught. They are like flowers in green houses. They never seemed to suffer from hardship as their parents overprotect them. As I already mentioned, I don't agree physical punishment is the best policy. However, sometimes it is very necessary. Nowadays, many school came up with new kind of punishment such as throwing bad students out instead of physical punishments. I think it's totally irresponsible. I believe physical punishments can be a good opportunity to make bad students realize what they did and have to do. By the way, I sorry that I can't write long letter. ^^ Seeya.

강사 첨삭

Good Evening! I\'m glad that you still remember our topics after class. For me, too much of everything is bad and that includes corporal punishment. Maybe we can do it sometimes but not often. nyway, I greatly appreciate that you had time in writing me a letter to let me know how are you. ^^ See you too! -T.Lara I\'m relieved because I can still talk to you, Lara, even though I couldn\'t help changing our class hour. >>I\'m relieved because I can still talk to you  Lara, even though I couldn\'t help changing our class hour.  We talked about corporal punishment at school. >>CORRECT! You know I\'m working at new Hakwon. >>CORRECT!  My new students are much more weak than previous students I taught. >>CORRECT! They are like flowers in green houses. >>CORRECT!  They never seemed to suffer from hardship as their parents overprotect them. >>CORRECT!  As I already mentioned, I don\'t agree physical punishment is the best policy. >>CORRECT!  However, sometimes it is very necessary. >>CORRECT!  Nowadays, many school came up with new kind of punishment such as throwing bad students out instead of physical punishments.  >>Nowadays, many school came up with new kinds of punishments such as throwing bad students out instead of physical punishments.  I think it\'s totally irresponsible. >>CORRECT!  I believe physical punishments can be a good opportunity to make bad students realize what they did and have to do. >>CORRECT!  By the way, I sorry that I can\'t write long letter. >>By the way, I\'m sorry that I can\'t write a long letter. ^^ Seeya. >>See you.

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