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 What's going on out there till now? Today, we talked about various festival held here in Korea. You know what? More and more people in Korea have been gathering into urban area such as Seoul, and the other metropolitan cities. That's why many rural areas suffer from lack of young labors. That means there's no source to make meney. The economy situation has collapsed dramatically in rural area. However, fortunately, local government came up with a good idea to solve this problem. Every rural town has their own special products such as Ginseng, beef, red pepper, and even insects. So they decided to hold their own festival to attract many young people who is likely to spend pretty much money on it. Usually, local festivals consist of various activities. For example, music concerts, trying delicious food, and demonstrating how to plant and make those products. If you have a chance, do not hesitate to join. You won't be regret. ^^ Bye. [이름]

Hi! Thank you so much for your composition. Great job! You were able to express your thoughts well! Keep it up! I enjoyed reading your composition. It was amazing. I hope that you had a great day! Talk to you soon. Take Care! T.Lara Here are my corrections for you:  What\'s going on out there till now? >>What\'s going on now? Today, we talked about various festival held here in Korea. >>Today, we talked about various festivals held here in Korea. You know what? >>Correct More and more people in Korea have been gathering into urban area such as Seoul, and the other metropolitan cities. >>More and more people in Korea go to Seoul and other metropolitan cities. That\'s why many rural areas suffer from lack of young labors. >>That\'s why rural areas suffer because of lack of young laborers. That means there\'s no source to make meney. >>It means there\'s no source to make money. The economy situation has collapsed dramatically in rural area. >>The economy\'s situation collapsed dramatically in rural areas.However, fortunately, local government came up with a good idea to solve this problem. >>Correct Every rural town has their own special products such as Ginseng, beef, red pepper, and even insects. >>Correct So they decided to hold their own festival to attract many young people who is likely to spend pretty much money on it. >>CorrectUsually, local festivals consist of various activities. >>Correct For example, music concerts, trying delicious food, and demonstrating how to plant and make those products. >>Correct If you have a chance, do not hesitate to join. >>Correct You won\'t be regret. ^^ >>You won\'t regret it.Bye. [이름] >>Correct