Dear [Name].

2012-09-13 · 첨삭 강사 Anne

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Next december, we're supposed to cast a ballot for our next president of Korea. The ruling party already selected thier candiate for presidency, who is Park Geun-hye. She is a daughter of former president Park Jung-hui. He was a dictator in 1970s though, he developed Korea a lot. That's why many people consider him as such a good president. However, the opposite party still struggles to select their own candiate. What's more, An Chul-soo who used to be a anti virus mogul now turned to be a scholar. As his popularity is really high especially young voters, the opposite party tried to make him join their party. But he refused to join the scandal-ridden party. His approval rating is much more than other candidates from The opposite party. People in Korea are really curious about An Chul-soo's stance. Probably, next week he's going to express his thoughts. If he become an candidate, many ballots are splited. It means next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party.

강사 첨삭

Wow. What a Political Thursday you have there. ^^ I guess everybody is anxious about the next elections in your country. It is the same here in our country. I think everywhere, Politics is a popular topic. Perhaps because, they will be the people who will be managing the country which means that we shall choose wisely right? See you in our class and goodnight!  -T.Lara^^ Next december, we\'re supposed to cast a ballot for our next president of Korea. >>Next December, we will cast our votes for the next president of Korea. The ruling party already selected thier candiate for presidency, who is Park Geun-hye. >>The ruling party already selected their candidate for presidency who is Park Geun-hye.  She is a daughter of former president Park Jung-hui. >>She is the daughter of the former President Park Jung-hui.  He was a dictator in 1970s though, he developed Korea a lot. >>He was a dictator in 1970s and he developed Korea a lot. That\'s why many people consider him as such a good president. >>CORRECT!However, the opposite party still struggles to select their own candiate. >>However, the opposite party is still struggling to select their own candidate. What\'s more, An Chul-soo who used to be a anti virus mogul now turned to be a scholar. >>CORRECT! As his popularity is really high especially young voters, the opposite party tried to make him join their party. >>Since his popularity is really good especially for young voters that\'s why the opposite party tried to make him join their party. But he refused to join the scandal-ridden party. >>He refused to join the scandal-ridden party.  His approval rating is much more than other candidates from The opposite party. >>CORRECT! People in Korea are really curious about An Chul-soo\'s stance. >>CORRECT!  Probably, next week he\'s going to express his thoughts. >>CORRECT!  If he become an candidate, many ballots are splited. >>If he became a candidate, many votes will be splitted.  It means next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party. >>It means the next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party.

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