Dear [Name].
학생이 쓴 원문
Next december, we're supposed to cast a ballot for our next president of Korea. The ruling party already selected thier candiate for presidency, who is Park Geun-hye. She is a daughter of former president Park Jung-hui. He was a dictator in 1970s though, he developed Korea a lot. That's why many people consider him as such a good president.
However, the opposite party still struggles to select their own candiate. What's more, An Chul-soo who used to be a anti virus mogul now turned to be a scholar. As his popularity is really high especially young voters, the opposite party tried to make him join their party. But he refused to join the scandal-ridden party. His approval rating is much more than other candidates from The opposite party.
People in Korea are really curious about An Chul-soo's stance. Probably, next week he's going to express his thoughts. If he become an candidate, many ballots are splited. It means next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party.
강사 첨삭
Wow. What a Political Thursday you have there. ^^
I guess everybody is anxious about the next elections in your country. It is the same here in our country. I think everywhere, Politics is a popular topic.
Perhaps because, they will be the people who will be managing the country which means that we shall choose wisely right?
See you in our class and goodnight!
-T.Lara^^
Next december, we\'re supposed to cast a ballot for our next president of Korea.
>>Next December, we will cast our votes for the next president of Korea.
The ruling party already selected thier candiate for presidency, who is Park Geun-hye.
>>The ruling party already selected their candidate for presidency who is Park Geun-hye.
She is a daughter of former president Park Jung-hui.
>>She is the daughter of the former President Park Jung-hui.
He was a dictator in 1970s though, he developed Korea a lot.
>>He was a dictator in 1970s and he developed Korea a lot.
That\'s why many people consider him as such a good president.
>>CORRECT!However, the opposite party still struggles to select their own candiate.
>>However, the opposite party is still struggling to select their own candidate.
What\'s more, An Chul-soo who used to be a anti virus mogul now turned to be a scholar.
>>CORRECT!
As his popularity is really high especially young voters, the opposite party tried to make him join their party.
>>Since his popularity is really good especially for young voters that\'s why the opposite party tried to make him join their party.
But he refused to join the scandal-ridden party.
>>He refused to join the scandal-ridden party.
His approval rating is much more than other candidates from The opposite party. >>CORRECT!
People in Korea are really curious about An Chul-soo\'s stance.
>>CORRECT!
Probably, next week he\'s going to express his thoughts.
>>CORRECT!
If he become an candidate, many ballots are splited.
>>If he became a candidate, many votes will be splitted.
It means next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party.
>>It means the next president would be Park Geun-hye from the ruling party.
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