Dear [Name],

It’s the first writing that I wrote to you. Today was gloomy. But I felt happy because today is the first day of this semester. There was a big cleanup in my lab today. We gathered at 10 AM to start cleaning the room. There are three new students who entered this time so we arranged desks and bookshelves for them. The lab mates came here more for cleaning than I expected. Therefore we could finish it quickly. After cleaning, we went to have a lunch to cafeteria all together. We had eaten a lunch in a long time. We found out a beautiful small garden where is near the cafeteria. I didn’t realize it until today because that just can be approached from the cafeteria. After lunch, we enjoyed new place. This is today’s story. See you tomorrow. Have a nice day.

Hello there [이름], I'm so happy to receive a composition from you. Thank you for sending one. Keep sending to improve your writing skills.  I think you had a great time yesterday.  Your story reminded me of my University years.   Oh! I miss hanging out with my classmates. By the way, here are my corrections for  you. Have fun! Love, Verna It's the first writing that I wrote to you. >>It's the first composition that I wrote to you.Today was gloomy. But I felt happy because today is the first day of this semester. >>Today is gloomy. But I feel happy because it is the first day of this semester.There was a big cleanup in my lab today. We gathered at 10 AM to start cleaning the room. >>There's a big cleanup in my lab today. We gathered at 10 AM to start cleaning the room.There are three new students who entered this time so we arranged desks and bookshelves for them.  >>There are three new students who enrolled so we arranged desks and bookshelves for them. The lab mates came here more for cleaning than I expected.  >>More of my lab mates came here for cleaning than I expected. Therefore we finished it quickly. >>Correct  After cleaning, we went to have a lunch to cafeteria all together. >>After cleaning, we all went to have a lunch to a cafeteria together.  We had eaten a lunch in a long time.  >>We haven't eaten lunch in a long time.We found out a beautiful small garden where is near the cafeteria.  >>We found out a beautiful small garden near the cafeteria.  I didn’t realize it until today because that just can be approached from the cafeteria. >>I didn't realize it until today because we just approached  the cafeteria.  After lunch, we enjoyed new place. >>After lunch, we enjoyed a new place.This is today's story. >>CorrectSee you tomorrow. Have a nice day. >>Correct