Dear [Name]
학생이 쓴 원문
Happy hump day!! Chelsea. It's really sweltering hot these days here in Korea. So people also get exhausted even when they are under air conditioner. To make matter worse, office workers are advised to save energy to prevent electricity shortage. Come to think of it, I'm glad you liked my poor performance. When I was younger, I enjoyed music a lot. At that time, I spent all day listening music, playing piano, and singing a song. I don't know why. For a long time, I left my passion for music behind myself. I think I've been busy in working until now. Lately, I met my current girl friend. I had a chance for looking back what I've been like. That's why I bought a new guitar again. I began to play a song for you. I wish I had played a guitar more vividly for you in person. I'm also wanna know how you spend your extra time. Do you raise any pets or work out regularly?? ^^ Any way, Seize the rest of day. See ya. Written by [이름]
강사 첨삭
Hi there ^-^
I\'m really happy that you\'re starting to play guitar again.
I believe it\'s time for you to continue doing your passion. You deserve that!
Whew! It would be a pleasure to see you play guitar in person. I just hope!
Anyway, thank you for sending this in. I enjoyed reading it.
All the best,
Teacher Chelsea
Here are my corrections:
Happy hump day!! Chelsea.
>>Happy hump day Chelsea!!
It\'s really sweltering hot these days here in Korea.
>>Correct :)
So people also get exhausted even when they are under air conditioner.
>>Correct :)
To make matter worse, office workers are advised to save energy to prevent electricity shortage.
>>To make the matter worse, ....
Come to think of it, I\'m glad you liked my poor performance.
>>Come to think of it! I\'m glad you like my poor performance.
When I was younger, I enjoyed music a lot.
>>When I was young, I enjoyed music a lot.
At that time, I spent all day listening music, playing piano, and singing a song.
>>At that time, I spent all day listening to music, playing piano and singing a song.
I don\'t know why. For a long time, I left my passion for music behind myself.
>>I don\'t know why but after a long time I left my passion for music behin me.
I think I\'ve been busy in working until now.
>>I think I\'ve been busy working until now.
Lately, I met my current girl friend. I had a chance for looking back what I\'ve been like.
>>Correct :)
That\'s why I bought a new guitar again. I began to play a song for you. I wish I had played a guitar more vividly for you in person.
>>Correct :) Wow!!
I\'m also wanna know how you spend your extra time.
>>I also wanna know you spend your extra time.
Do you raise any pets or work out regularly?? ^^
>>Correct :)
Anyway, seize the rest of day. See ya. Written by [이름]
>>Correct :)
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