Dear [Name]
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Happy Friday, Chelsea. Were it not for Friday, what would you think of our lives? You know what? People really enjoy Friday much more than weekend same way people enjoy preparing for traveling a lot more than traveling itself. In my case, when I was in military service, frankly I'd never been happy during regular vacation, for about 9 nights and 10 days because I felt worried about coming back to camp where horrible seniors ready for picking on me. On the other hand, I was really excited while I was waiting for the vacation. It's very interesting, isn't it? In addition, one of my friends also told me his own story. When he was studying for a civil worker, he wished he would carry out anything as far as he passed the test. Now he is a police office but he always tells me 'before I became a officer, I was still happier than now'. Almost every night, quarrels happen and his boss doesn't want to let him be free. I just came up with a new idea. Even if we suffer from so many difficulties now, someday we will probably miss what we do, what we have, who we are. Today's letter is full of philosophy: Carpe diem which means seize the day in Latin. Bye.
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Same with you [이름]!^^
It\'s good to see a long paragraph here,..
I do understand what you had gone through before..
It\'s hard but that\'s life..=)
In the end,those experiences only teach us important lessons..
For now, we have to face the present^^
T. Chelsea
Here are my corrections for you:
Were it not for Friday, what would you think of our lives?
>>If there were no \"fridays\",what do you think would happen to our lives?
OR:Think of this?If there were no \"fridays\",what would probably happen to our lives?
You know what?
>>CORRECT
People really enjoy Friday much more than weekend same way people enjoy preparing for traveling a lot more than traveling itself.
>>People really enjoy friday much more than weekends. The same way as people enjoy preparing for a travell more than the travelling itself.
In my case, when I was in military service, frankly I\'d never been happy during regular vacation, for about 9 nights and 10 days because I felt worried about coming back to camp where horrible seniors ready for picking on me.
>>In my case, when I was in the military service, frankly, I\'d never been happy during regular vacation of about 9 nights and 10 days because I felt worried about coming back to camp where horrible seniors are ready to pick on me.
On the other hand, I was really excited while I was waiting for the vacation.
>>CORRECT
It\'s very interesting, isn\'t it?
>>CORRECT
In addition, one of my friends also told me his own story.
>>In addition, one of my friend also told me his story.
When he was studying for a civil worker, he wished he would carry out anything as far as he passed the test.
>>When he was studying as a civil worker, he wished he would carry out anything for him to pass the test.
Now he is a police office but he always tells me \'before I became a officer, I was still happier than now\'.
>> Now, he is a police officer but he always tells me that he is happier now than before.
Almost every night, quarrels happen and his boss doesn\'t want to let him be free.
>>Almost every night, quarrels happen and his boss does not want to let him free.
I just came up with a new idea.
>>CORRECT
Even if we suffer from so many difficulties now, someday we will probably miss what we do, what we have, who we are.
>> Even if we suffer from so many difficulties now, someday we will probably miss what we do, what we have and, who we are.
Today\'s letter is full of philosophy: Carpe diem which means seize the day in Latin. Bye.
>>CORRECT
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