Dear [Name]

2013-10-31 · 첨삭 강사 Angel

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Dear [Name]'s getting colder and colder outside. People begin to wear warm clothes. Yes, winter is just around the corner. The thermometer says around 6 degree though, I feel warm because good lads like you always care about me. Somehow, we talked about my exes this afternoon. Just a few days ago, while I was driving and listening to music, I wiped my eyes. The lyrics are like that 'What happened? Was it so hard to live happily ever after with him? I should have kept you from walking away. I should have told you I loved you more'. I thought just letting her go was the best policy I could do. I still hope she lives much more happily. However like the lyrics, if I knew she suffered from many difficulties especially her current boy friend, I would feel really sorry, miserable, and frustrated. In my case, I could be the better man thanks to her. By causing her cry many times, I've learned so many lessons. I know it's a useless thought. But I just believe what I had done to her was not full of terrible memories she would like to erase for good. I really hope she also lives happily ever after, saying the history was not bad as I do. Bye.

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Hi there [이름]! I was smiling reading your composition.^-^ It\'s great that you feel like that for her. Anyway, thanks for sending this composition. See you in class. T. Chelsea   Dear [Name]>>correct!It\'s getting colder and colder outside. >>correct People begin to wear warm clothes. >>correct >> OR: People are already wearing thick clothes. Yes, winter is just around the corner. >>correct The thermometer says around 6 degree though, I feel warm because good lads like you always care about me. >>correct Somehow, we talked about my exes this afternoon. >>correct Just a few days ago, while I was driving and listening to music, I wiped my eyes. >>correct The lyrics are like that \'What happened? Was it so hard to live happily ever after with him? >>correct I should have kept you from walking away. >>correct I should have told you I loved you more\'. >>correct I thought just letting her go was the best policy I could do. >>correct OR >> I thought just letting her go was the best thing I could do. I still hope she lives much more happily. >>correct However like the lyrics, if I knew she suffered from many difficulties especially her current boy friend, I would feel really sorry, miserable, and frustrated. >>correct In my case, I could be the better man thanks to her. >>In my case, I could be a better man. Thanks to her. By causing her cry many times, I\'ve learned so many lessons. >>correct I know it\'s a useless thought. >>correct But I just believe what I had done to her was not full of terrible memories she would like to erase for good. >>correct I really hope she also lives happily ever after, saying the history was not bad as I do. >>correct Bye. >>correct

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