Dear [Name]
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TGIF, it's Friday again. ^^ Wedding ceremony again. One of my friends will get married this weekend. Fortunately, I don't have to anything except for participating in. Interview for graduate school is coming up two weeks later. So I've got butterflies in my stomach. I have a headache, too. I know I need to calm down and relax but it's not easier said than done. Don't worry, Chelsea, I'm going to overtake this from now on. Do you remember the singer I mentioned yesterday? His movies and songs were very popular. He made a huge success. After he released his 10th album in 2003, he announced he was going to retire as a singer, and he was going to focus on acting. Many fan of him were quite shocked. They cried a lot because they couldn't listen to his live song any more. So did I. From then on, his movies were still successful. He was well know for his comic acting in his movie. However, nobody could imagine miserable things would happen to him. He was making a living with his wife and three children. Sadly, his youngest child turned out to be a kid from another guy whom his wife made an affair with. OMG. So, he decided to divorce and raise only two children by himself. For a long time, many people and his colleagues have advised him to write new songs and release his new album. Just recently, he accepted their offer. And his recent private event make people sympathize with more. His new album is also successful.
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HELLO [이름]!
Yeah,everybody is thankful that today\'s Friday.^^
We could have time with friends and family.
The singer\'s life story is sad, I\'m sure he\'s more inspired to create new songs of him because of such experience.^^
Anyway, have a blast this weekend.
See you in two days.
T. Chelsea
TGIF, it\'s Friday again. ^^
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Wedding ceremony again.
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One of my friends will get married this weekend.
>>correct!
Fortunately, I don\'t have to anything except for participating in.
>>Fortunately, I don\'t have to do anything except for participating in.
Interview for graduate school is coming up two weeks later.
>>correct!
So I\'ve got butterflies in my stomach.
>>correct!
I have a headache, too.
>>correct!
I know I need to calm down and relax but it\'s not easier said than done.
>>correct!
Don\'t worry, Chelsea, I\'m going to overtake this from now on.
>>correct!
Do you remember the singer I mentioned yesterday? His movies and songs were very popular.
>>correct!
He made a huge success.
>>correct!
After he released his 10th album in 2003, he announced he was going to retire as a singer, and he was going to focus on acting.
>>correct!
OR
>>After releasing his 10th album in 2003, he announced that he was going to retire as a singer, and he was going to focus on acting.
Many fan of him were quite shocked.
>>Many fans of him were quite shocked.
>>Many of his fans were quite shocked.
They cried a lot because they couldn\'t listen to his live song any more.
>>correct!
So did I.
>>correct!
From then on, his movies were still successful.
>>correct!
He was well know for his comic acting in his movie.
>>He was well known for his comic acting in his movie.
However, nobody could imagine miserable things would happen to him.
>>correct!
He was making a living with his wife and three children. >>correct!
Sadly, his youngest child turned out to be a kid from another guy whom his wife made an affair with.
>>correct!
OR>>Sadly, his youngest child turned out to be a kid from another guy whom his wife had an affair with.
OMG. So, he decided to divorce and raise only two children by himself.
>>OMG. So he decided to divorce his wife and raise his two children by hinself.
For a long time, many people and his colleagues have advised him to write new songs and release his new album.
>>correct!
Just recently, he accepted their offer.
>>correct!
And his recent private event make people sympathize with more. >>correct!
His new album is also successful. >>correct!
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