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2013-11-11 · 첨삭 강사 Chelsea

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How did you like your last weekend, Chelsea? As you know, I had been hectic carrying out several things last Saturday and Sunday. It's been a while since I last visited Seoul, which is capital city of Korea. It takes four hours from Andong where I live currently by car. That's why I went to Wonju where my girl friend lives in an effort to save the time and meet her earlier. It only took an hour to get Seoul from Wonju by train. Due to traffic congestion, I decided not to drive to Seoul. In the beginning of the morning, I got in trouble with getting on subway, which is equivalent to cube in England. Only two station, I had to go but I got on wrong subway, which was heading for other station. So I had to come back first station where I got on the first subway. When I came out the subway station, it began raining outside. Anyhow, I managed to get there and had an interview. I answered all the questions they asked but on the way back to Wonju, the more I think, the more regretful I felt. 'I should have done that better.' 'Why did I say that?' 'Was that all I could do?' These thoughts haunt me every time I breathe out. What's more. I argued with my girl friend. She is totally ticked off. When we were about to finish dinner, I found a small iron loofah, which is used for washing the dishes. I complained to the waiter about that. He said 'I see, I will tell my boss.' After a while, the waiter came back and said sorry, giving free beverage. So I said very politely to him 'I didn't mean to ask something like this but your boss' sincere apology. But my girl friend told me just go out regardless his sincere apology. I said 'wait, Am I doing something wrong?' 'I didn't mean to make a scene.' 'Why are you angry at me as if I were doing something wrong?' Frankly, I couldn't understand her behavior and my heart also hurt. She just kept silent and walked away from me. Several times I asked 'why' but she just got on her car and said 'just get in' I bursted into yelling 'why?' 'What did I do wrong?' Please give me your advice. You are a girl. You might know why she did so. Bye.

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Hey there! Sounds like you had a very busy weekend.   I\'m sure that you did good on your interview. Don\'t worry too much about it because it will only make you look older. Just kidding.   I\'m so sorry to hear about your fight with your girlfriend. Anyway, we can talk about this on our next class. I want to be able to tell you my advices over the phone so we wouldn\'t have any miscommunications here in our compositions.   Hope everything will be fine between the two of you soon!   Sincerely, [이름]   How did you like your last weekend, Chelsea? >>CORRECT! As you know, I had been hectic carrying out several things last Saturday and Sunday. >>As you know, it had been hectic because of carrying out several things last Saturday and Sunday. It\'s been a while since I last visited Seoul, which is capital city of Korea. >>It\'s been a whle since I last arrived in Seoul, which is the capital city of Korea. It takes four hours from Andong where I live currently by car. >>It takes four hours, by car, from Andong where I currently live. That\'s why I went to Wonju where my girl friend lives in an effort to save the time and meet her earlier. >>CORRECT! It only took an hour to get Seoul from Wonju by train. >>By train, it only took an hour to get to Seoul from Wonju. Due to traffic congestion, I decided not to drive to Seoul. >>CORRECT! In the beginning of the morning, I got in trouble with getting on subway, which is equivalent to cube in England. >>In the begining of the morning, I had some trouble with getting to the subway, ehich is equivalent to a cube in England. Only two station, I had to go but I got on wrong subway, which was heading for other station. >>There are only two stations that I can go to but I got on the wrong subway which was heading to the other station. So I had to come back first station where I got on the first subway. >>So I had to come back to the first station where I got on the first DO YOU MEAN TRAIN? When I came out the subway station, it began raining outside. >>When I came out on the other station, it began raining. Anyhow, I managed to get there and had an interview. >>Anyhow, I managed to get there and had an interview. I answered all the questions they asked but on the way back to Wonju, the more I think, the more regretful I felt. >>I answered all the questions they asked me on the way back to Wonju but the more I thought about it, the more regretful I felt. \'I should have done that better.\' \'Why did I say that?\' \'Was that all I could do?\' >>CORRECT! These thoughts haunt me every time I breathe out. >>CORRECT! What\'s more. I argued with my girl friend. >>What\'s more, I argued with my girlfriend. She is totally ticked off. >>CORRECT! When we were about to finish dinner, I found a small iron loofah, which is used for washing the dishes. >>CORRECT! I complained to the waiter about that. >>CORRECT! He said \'I see, I will tell my boss.\' >>CORRECT! After a while, the waiter came back and said sorry, giving free beverage. >>After a while, the waiter came back and said sorry, giving a free beverage. So I said very politely to him \'I didn\'t mean to ask something like this but your boss\' sincere apology. >>So I politely told him \'I didn\'t mean to ask something like this from your boss\' with sincere apology. But my girl friend told me just go out regardless his sincere apology. >>But, my girlfriend told me to go out regardless of the sincere apology. I said \'wait, Am I doing something wrong?\' \'I didn\'t mean to make a scene.\' \'Why are you angry at me as if I were doing something wrong?\' >>CORRECT! Frankly, I couldn\'t understand her behavior and my heart also hurt. >>CORRECT! She just kept silent and walked away from me. >>CORRECT! Several times I asked \'why\' but she just got on her car and said \'just get in\' I bursted into yelling \'why?\' \'What did I do wrong?\' >>CORRECT! Please give me your advice. >>CORRECT! You are a girl. >>CORRECT! You might know why she did so. >>CORRECT! Bye. >>CORRECT!

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