Dear [Name],

2010-12-07 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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I was too sore on a throat to swallow in the morning. After the class, I drank two cups of ginger tea which my mother sent me last week. It was effective. It was getting better.I want to say about Cutie Honey again. First session of its lyric is "a girl having a pretty hip, a girl like me. Looking at me, shake honey!" Is it too straight, isn't it? Both of a remake song and an original song have an almost same lyric. When I first listened to it, I was surprised because of blunt expression. A remake song wasn't popular that much. But Kumi's original song had been sensationally popular. Actually after this song, Kumi had become a top and national singer in Japan. I think she has an incredibly gorgeous voice. But due to a performance emphasizing sex appeal, I think charm of her voice is lost.

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Hi [이름], I'm glad that you are feeling better because of the ginger tea that your mother sent you. About Cutie honey, I agree with you that the lyrics of the song wasn't good. kkk. Take care! -Verna-   I was too sore on a throat to swallow in the morning. >> My throat was too sore this morning. After the class, I drank two cups of ginger tea which my mother sent me last week. >>Correct It was effective. >>Correct  It was getting better. >>Correct I want to say about Cutie Honey again. >>I want to tell you about Honey again. First session of its lyric is "a girl having a pretty hip, a girl like me. >>The first part of its lyric goes like this "a girl having a pretty hip, a girl like me". Looking at me, shake honey!" Is it too straight, isn't it? >>"Looking at me, shake honey!" Isn't it too straight? Both of a remake song and an original song have an almost same lyric. >> Both the remake and the original song have almost the same lyrics. When I first listened to it, I was surprised because of blunt expression. >>When I first listened to it, I was surprised because of the blunt expression. A remake song wasn't popular that much. >>Correct >> The remake wasn't that much popular. But Kumi's original song had been sensationally popular. >>Correct Actually after this song, Kumi had become a top and national singer in Japan. >>Correct >>Actually after this song, Kumi became a top and national singer in Japan. I think she has an incredibly gorgeous voice. >>Correct  But due to a performance emphasizing sex appeal, I think charm of her voice is lost. >>But due to a performance emphasizing sex appeal, I think the chram of her voice is lost.

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