Dear [Name]

2016-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

Hey Lynn. It's a brand-new week again. Some people say Monday is blue but why don't we look on the bright side. Monday is another gift we can enjoy. We talked about Culture Center this morning. My wife and I want to provide my daughter with many opportunities such as playing with various toys, interactions with other kids and challenges a little difficult for her. We never want to raise her in an overprotective way like plants in a greenhouse. On returning from Culture Center, my wife told me she was quite satisfied with today's class as well as my little daughter. Pororo, one of the most popular character here in Korea, visited the Center and had an enjoyable time with kids. You know what? My daughter was the only one who bursted into tears when Pororo said 'goodbyd'. BTW, have a nice day. See you tomorrow morning. Until then, bye.

강사 첨삭

Hey there [이름],

And now it\'s another Tuesday! Well, it\'s good that you think like that. Providing opportunities for your daughter to learn and grow is your job of course but it\'s great that you think differently from the \'traditional\' parents. I hope she\'ll be a happy and contented child  who knows how to appreciate everything you do for her. Enjoy your lunch and I\'ll see you again tomorrow!

Take care!

 

Hey Lynn. It\'s a brand-new week again.

>>correct!

Some people say Monday is blue but why don\'t we look on the bright side.

>>Some people have the Monday blues but why don\'t we look on the bright side.

Monday is another gift we can enjoy.
>>correct!
We talked about Culture Center this morning.

>>We talked about the Culture Center this morning.

My wife and I want to provide my daughter with many opportunities such as playing with various toys, interactions with other kids and challenges a little difficult for her.

>>My wife and I want to provide my daughter with many opportunities such as playing with various toys, interactions with other kids and challenges which are a little difficult for her.

We never want to raise her in an overprotective way like plants in a greenhouse.
>>correct!
On returning from Culture Center, my wife told me she was quite satisfied with today\'s class as well as my little daughter.

>> Upon returning from the Culture Center, my wife told me she was quite satisfied with today\'s class as well as my little daughter.

Pororo, one of the most popular character here in Korea, visited the Center and had an enjoyable time with the kids.

>>correct!

You know what? My daughter was the only one who bursted into tears when Pororo said \'goodbye\'.
>>correct!
BTW, have a nice day.

>>correct!

See you tomorrow morning. Until then, bye.

>>correct!

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