Dear [Name]

2016-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

Hey Lynn. Happy hump day~!! I went to bed late again last night. You know what? Finishing my work, I took a shower and read a book lying on sofa. I just dozed off for a minute. After that, I never fall asleep again until 5 a.m. You always wake me up every morning. ^^ As young kids are getting older, they get more and more knowledge but sometimes I think that kinds of education rather makes them stupid, less creative, less emotional especially here in Korea. We no longer appreciate everyday lives and everything trivial. We only focus on special events such as traveling around touristy attractions. However, every stuff around us is worth enjoying. All we have to do is just chagne our perspective.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

A blessed Thursday to you!

It often happen to me before. I am reading a novel and it was interesting so I want to finish it. I keep on reading and when I finished the novel it\'s already 6 or 7 in the morning. I was really surprise because when I started reading it was really dark and when I look out the window again it was really bright. Maybe that\'s what happened to you. See you later!


Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

Hey Lynn. Happy hump day~!!

>>correct!

I went to bed late again last night.

>>correct!

You know what? Finishing my work, I took a shower and read a book lying on sofa.

>>You know what? After finishing my work, I took a shower and read a book lying on the sofa.

I just dozed off for a minute.

>>correct!

After that, I never fall asleep again until 5 a.m. You always wake me up every morning. ^^
>>correct!
As young kids are getting older, they get more and more knowledge but sometimes I think that kinds of education rather makes them stupid, less creative, less emotional especially here in Korea.

>>As young kids are getting older, they get more and more knowledge but sometimes I think that kind of education  makes them stupid, less creative, less emotional especially here in Korea.

We no longer appreciate everyday lives and everything trivial.

>>We no longer appreciate everyday life and everything trivial.

We only focus on special events such as traveling around touristy attractions.

>>We only focus on special events such as traveling around tourist attractions.

However, every stuff around us is worth enjoying. All we have to do is just change our perspective.

>>correct!

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