Dear [Name]

2016-07-12 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

Good to have you back this morning. Let's get ourselves ready for brand new week. We talked about THAAD deployment here in Korea. U.S government wants to defend any missiles from North Korea. Our government also take use of the system in an effort to pretect our territory from potential attacks. But this is what all the newspaper and media have reported so far. Some people still worry about the side effect from THAAD. U.S try to employ the system not only for its original purpose but also keeping an eye on China, Japan, and other Asia countries. That's why Chinese government strongly express how they feel about THAAD. Once we decide to deploy the system, our relationship among our neighboring countries might be worsen dramatically. What's worse, THAAD is not free of charge at ll. It costs quite a lot of budget for our government. Kind of controversial issues, isn't it? Any way, have a nice day, Lynn. See you tomorrow morning. Thanks to you, I can't wait for it.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름],

Thank you for explaining it thoroughly to me. So the US kind of has an ulterior motive in doing this and they even ask your government to pay for it? Now, I understand why China strongly opposes this move. China is having a lot of land dispute about territorial boundaries with many countries  like the Philippines right now so they would never allow this. Anyway, let\'s have another informative discussion later. See you!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

Good to have you back this morning. Let\'s get ourselves ready for a brand new week.

>>correct!
We talked about THAAD deployment here in Korea. U.S government wants to defend any missiles from North Korea.

>>We talked about THAAD deployment here in Korea. The U.S government wants to defend against any missiles from North Korea.

Our government also take use of the system in an effort to pretect our territory from potential attacks.

>>Our government will also make use of the system in an effort to protect our territory from potential attacks.

But this is what all the newspaper and media have reported so far.

>>correct!
Some people still worry about the side effect from THAAD.

>>Some people still worry about the side effects of THAAD.

U.S try to employ the system not only for its original purpose but also keeping an eye on China, Japan, and other Asia countries.

>>U.S try to employ the system not only for its original purpose but also to keep their eyes on China, Japan, and other Asian countries.

That\'s why Chinese government strongly express how they feel about THAAD.

>>That\'s why the Chinese government strongly expresses how they feel about THAAD.

Once we decide to deploy the system, our relationship among our neighboring countries might be worsen dramatically.

>>Once we decide to deploy the system, our relationship among our neighboring countries might  worsen dramatically.

What\'s worse, THAAD is not free of charge at ll. It costs quite a lot of budget for our government.

>>What\'s worse is THAAD is not free of charge. It costs quite a lot of money from the budget of our government.

Kind of controversial issue, isn\'t it? Any way, have a nice day, Lynn.

>>correct!

See you tomorrow morning. Thanks to you, I can\'t wait for it.

>>correct!

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