Dear [Name]

2016-07-15 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

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Hello again. Korean drama is quite popular in your country as well as here. We call it 'junk drama'. As junk food is not that good for our health at all but people crave for eating, junk drama is not that good story but all the people cannot wait for watching these kinds of drama. In the drama I mentioned, 'FIve kids', main actress got divored by her husband, who made an affair with his wife's best friend. Thereafter, she couldn't help making a living with her three kids for herself. In the company for which she works, main actor works as a captain, who was left with his two kids because his wife passed away by disease. As you expected, they soon fell in love. Unfortunately, there are so many obstacles between them for their second marriage. Main actor's mom opposed seriously his second marriage. She doesn't want to someone who has three kids from ex-husband to be her new daughter-in-law. By the way, have a nice day. Bye.

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Hi [이름],

It sounds interesting. Maybe, I will try to watch it this weekend. Yes, Korean dramas are very famous in the Philippines. In fact, Descendants of the Sun will be shown on Philippine TV dubbed in Filipino starting next week, I think. Have a wonderful weekend and I\'ll see you again on Monday!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

 

Hello again.

>>correct!

Korean drama is quite popular in your country as well as here.

>>correct!

We call it \'junk drama\'.

>>correct!

As junk food is not that good for our health at all but people crave for eating, junk drama is not that good story but all the people cannot wait for watching these kinds of drama.

>>As junk food is not good for our health at all but people crave it, junk drama doesn\'t have a good story but many people cannot wait to watch these kinds of drama.
In the drama I mentioned, \'FIve kids\', main actress got divored by her husband, who made an affair with his wife\'s best friend.

>>In the drama I mentioned \'Five Kids\', the main actress got divorced because her husband had an affair with her best friend.

Thereafter, she couldn\'t help making a living with her three kids for herself.

>>Therefore, she has to make a living for her three kids.

In the company for which she works, main actor works as a captain, who was left with his two kids because his wife passed away by disease.

>>In the company where she work, the main actor works as a captain who was left with two kids because his wife passed away due to a disease.

As you expected, they soon fell in love.

>>As is expected, they soon fell in love.

Unfortunately, there are so many obstacles between them for their second marriage.

>>Unfortunately, there are so many obstacles for their second marriage.
Main actor\'s mom opposed seriously his second marriage.

>>The main actor\'s mom seriously opposed his second marriage.

She doesn\'t want to someone who has three kids from ex-husband to be her new daughter-in-law.

>>She doesn\'t want someone who is a divorcee with three kids to become her daughter-in-law. 
By the way, have a nice day. Bye.

>>correct!

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